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If your friend were having difficulty deciding his or her major, what advice would you give him or her and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

If your friend were having difficulty deciding his or her major, what advice would you give him or her and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Large cities are usually economic hubs of a country. Cities are usually more densely populated when compared to towns and villages. People in cities face numerous problems due to pollution, population, traffic etc. Let's discuss a few of these problems, and possible solutions in the following paragraphs. One common problem in most urban locations is its traffic. Due to the increase in vehicle density, travelling within the city has become the nightmare for many of us. It was known from a survey that, in some metros like New York, London cars per capita is more than 2. This not only increases congestion, but also increases pollution due to the fact that most of the vehicles run on fossil fuels. Industries in and around cities are only adding fuel to the fire. In developing nations, city dwellers are suffering with lack of basic necessities like pure water, air and land. Most of the above problems can be solved by bringing in awareness among citizens. For example, extensive usage of public transport can bring down the number of vehicles plying on the road which in-turn reduces traffic. By imposing stricter environmental norms for restricting pollution, we can bring down toxic substances and improve standard of living. The responsibility of tackling this problem lies not only in the hands of people but also requires government help. It is clear that many of these challenges are man-made and can be resolved with determination and stringent monitoring by the governing bodies and citizens themselves. If these norms are followed and rules are adhered to, cities can become beautiful places to live in.
Large
cities
are
usually
economic hubs of a country.
Cities
are
usually
more
densely
populated when compared to towns and villages.
People
in
cities
face numerous
problems
due to pollution, population, traffic etc.
Let
's discuss a few of these
problems
, and possible solutions in the following paragraphs.

One common
problem
in most urban locations is its traffic. Due to the increase in vehicle density, travelling within the city has become the nightmare for
many
of us. It
was known
from a survey that, in
some
metros like New York, London cars per capita is more than 2. This not
only
increases congestion,
but
also
increases pollution due to the fact that most of the vehicles run on fossil fuels. Industries in and around
cities
are
only
adding fuel to the fire. In developing nations, city dwellers are suffering with lack of
basic necessities
like pure water, air and land.

Most of the above
problems
can
be solved
by bringing in awareness among citizens.
For example
, extensive usage of public transport can bring down the number of vehicles plying on the road which in-turn
reduces
traffic. By imposing stricter environmental norms for restricting pollution, we can bring down toxic substances and
improve
standard of living. The responsibility of tackling this
problem
lies not
only
in the hands of
people
but
also
requires
government
help
.

It is
clear
that
many
of these challenges are
man
-made and can
be resolved
with determination and stringent monitoring by the governing bodies and citizens themselves. If these norms
are followed
and
rules
are adhered
to,
cities
can become
beautiful
places to
live
in.
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IELTS essay If your friend were having difficulty deciding his or her major, what advice would you give him or her and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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