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If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition what would you choose Why Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice v.3

If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition what would you choose Why Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice v. 3
International exhibitions are very interesting. Most of the time they recreate the public by means of some kind of showings. Those exhibitions shows to rest of the world what is happening or what happened in terms of art, culture, literature in their respective countries. If I were asked to send one thing representing my country to an international exhibition I would definitely send a painting of a very important artist from my country named Carlos Enriquez and his piece name is El rapto de la mulatas what in English means the kidnapping of the mulatas. This fine piece of art represents very clear the Cuban sense of anti-colonialism and also shows to the world some distinctive Cuban features. Firstly, I would like to show to the rest of the world how a very old painting represented the Cubans sense of anti-colonialism. Cuba was an Spain colony. Cubans suffer a lot during that period, there was too much war, fighting, suffering among Cubans during that time. Too many families got broken since too many people died during the war against Spain. That painting clearly shows how two men were kidnapping two women. Those women probably were fighting for their freedom as well. Those women weren’t white. They were mulatas what was the name given to people that were born from a white and a black person relationship. Those beautiful women showed struggling and how they were fighting for their freedom. The men were forcing them to do something that clearly the women didn' t wanted to do. Those two women were representing the fight and the furious feeling that Cubans were facing during that hard time, trying to fight and to avoid been a colony forever. And those men represented the Hispanic people trying to take away the Cuban’s freedom. Secondly, I would choose this fine piece of art since it shows some Cuban features as well. There is a big landscape that is how most of the Cuban country side looks like, opened green areas with trees. There is also some palm trees in the painting. This tree is known as the national tree. There are a vast number of them all around the country. The painting shows also some sensuality in the two women’s faces. This is how Cuba’s women are represented. They are seen as very sensual and beautiful women compared to women from the rest of the world. The author also used in this art some colors. This absolutely represents how colorful our country is. He used red, orange, yellow, some distinctive colors of energy, fierce just as Cubans are. To conclude with; if I were asked to send a representative thing of my country to an international exhibition I will for sure send The Mulatas Kidnapping, a painting by Carlos Enriquez, this art will show to the world how was the Cuban feeling when we were being colonized and it will also show some Cuban features as well. I will be sure that the public will enjoy this story told by this painter by using his hands and his talent.
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one thing representing my
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to an international exhibition I would definitely
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named Carlos
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. This fine piece of
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represents
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the Cuban sense of anti-colonialism and
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to the
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distinctive Cuban features.

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to the rest of the
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how a
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old
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painting
represented the Cubans sense of anti-colonialism. Cuba was
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Spain colony. Cubans suffer a lot during that period, there was too much war, fighting, suffering among Cubans during that time. Too
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families
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broken since too
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during the war against Spain. That
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clearly
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how two
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were kidnapping two
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probably
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weren’t white. They were
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what was the name
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that
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from a white and a black person relationship. Those
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beautiful
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women
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showed
struggling and how they were fighting for their freedom. The
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were forcing them to do something that
clearly
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women
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were representing the fight and the furious feeling that Cubans were facing during that
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time, trying to fight and to avoid been a colony forever. And those
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men
represented the Hispanic
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people
trying to take away the Cuban’s freedom.

Secondly
, I would choose this fine piece of
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art
since it
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shows
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some
Cuban features
as well
. There is a
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landscape
that is
how most of the Cuban
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side looks like, opened green areas with
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. There is
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palm
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is known
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. The
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also
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sensuality in the two
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women’s
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are represented
. They are
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as
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sensual and
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compared to
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from the rest of the
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. The author
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colors. This
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is. He
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red, orange, yellow,
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distinctive colors of energy, fierce
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as Cubans are.

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with; if I
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a representative thing of my
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to an international exhibition I will for sure
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The
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Mulatas
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by Carlos
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Enriquez
, this
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art
will
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to the
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how was the Cuban feeling when we were
being colonized
and it will
also
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Cuban features
as well
. I will be sure that the public will enjoy this story
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by this painter by using his hands and his talent.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition what would you choose Why Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
514 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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