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If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition what would you choose Why Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice v.1

If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition what would you choose Why Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice v. 1
In the past decade, travelling has become increasingly popular all over the world. Some school of thought believes that, when an individual travels into the different culture they should habituate to local views and mannerisms. This essay will discuss why one should always follow the host culture for a better travel experience. Personally, I completely agree with this as this keeps sightseers safe while travelling in another country. Some individuals think that, one should always follow the rules of the host culture while on the trip because it shows the sign that they are respecting local customs and traditions. If they follow the same etiquette that locals wear, they respect you back enthusiastically. For example, this can be done by wearing a scarf which is covering one's head, especially in countries like Malaysia, Indonesia where they show respect to their god. Therefore, in order to have a better experience while on trip one should always respect and follow local mannerisms. While travelling to foreign countries or living abroad, one should always constrain their political views to themselves. If they try to impose their opinion on indigenous people, which their views differ from one another. In this scenario, one should be careful before they express their opinion. For example, if a sightseer from America praises their leaders in North Korea, things can escalate to a higher level where one can be fined or sentenced to life imprisonment. Thus, following local beliefs while on vacation is always an excellent idea. To conclude, some section of individual believes that when a person travels abroad, they should adapt to local traditions and theories in order to have a safe travel. Personally, I completely agree with this because it shows, not only how much we respect their practices, but also for memorable outcomes.
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increasingly
popular all over the world.
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Some
school of
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thought
believes that, when an individual
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travels
into the
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different
culture they should habituate to
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local
views and mannerisms. This essay will discuss why one should always
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follow
the host culture for a better
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travel
experience.
Personally
, I completely
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agree
with this as this
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keeps
sightseers safe while travelling in another country.

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individuals
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think
that, one should always
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follow
the
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rules
of the host culture while on the trip
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because
it
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shows
the
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sign
that they are respecting
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local
customs and traditions. If they
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follow
the same etiquette that
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locals
wear, they
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respect
you back
enthusiastically
.
For example
, this can
be done
by wearing a scarf which is covering one's head,
especially
in countries like Malaysia, Indonesia where they
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show
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respect
to their god.
Therefore
, in order to have a better experience while on trip one should always
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respect
and
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follow
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local
mannerisms.

While travelling to foreign countries or living abroad, one should always constrain their political views to themselves. If they try to impose their opinion on indigenous
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people
, which their views differ from one another. In this scenario, one should be careful
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before
they express their opinion.
For example
, if a sightseer from America praises their leaders in North Korea, things can escalate to a higher level where one can
be fined
or sentenced to life imprisonment.
Thus
, following
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local
beliefs while on vacation is always an excellent
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idea
.

To conclude
,
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some
section of individual believes that when a person
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travels
abroad, they should adapt to
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local
traditions and theories in order to have a safe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
.
Personally
, I completely
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agree
with this
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because
it
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shows
, not
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only
how much we
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respect
their practices,
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but
also
for memorable outcomes.
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IELTS essay If you were asked to send one thing representing your country to an international exhibition what would you choose Why Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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