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TPO 12 Task 2Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v.2

TPO 12 Task 2 it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 2
In these competitive world it is crucial for us to get the most possible skills and abilities because they will come handy someday. On the other hand, Scientists believe that the mind has limit capacity and it can' t place a fair amount information of various subjects. So this is a controversial issue which has always arguments between advocates and critics of both schools of thought. We live in the era of technology and machines and the access to information in every subject is at the easiest and fastest form ever thanks to good inventions and developments. So in this modern time it is inevitable to get information from variety of sources and our job is just to limit and select the amount and subject of them in the way we want and need it. For instance, there are plenty of scientific TV programs and it is really hard task to choose our favorite and essential ones. Moreover, nowadays everyone has some skills and abilities so we should compare each other to get better situation in every issue including job or education. This may force us to desire getting information in every subject even irrelevant ones to our field. For example, a person who is graduated in mechanical engineering should expand his skills in other areas like computer sciences and English language because employers expect some experts with high command in all areas. But the key point here is considering the capacity and efficiency of our mind. Scientists believe that people can' t have a deep understanding of subjects in various areas and fields and they will forget the information which they don' t use in their daily life. So it is just wasting our time to get unnecessary information which we don' t need and we can' t make any improvement in our life using them. Meanwhile, because our knowledge is superficially so we aren' t expert at those areas and consequently they will add us nothing. As far I' m concerned it, it' s preferable to get a very deep understanding in a certain subject rather than getting superficially knowledge in a vast variety of subjects. This is the better option because by this way we can focus and concentrate on a specific matter and our brain can organize information very well. Finally, I deeply believe that unnecessary information will just make our brain busy and will decrease its performance.
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get
the most possible
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skills
and abilities
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because
they will
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come
handy someday.
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, Scientists believe that the mind has limit capacity and it
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fair
amount
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information
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subjects
.
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So
this is a controversial issue which has always arguments between advocates and critics of both schools of
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thought
.

We
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live
in the era of technology and machines and the access to
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information
in every
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subject
is at the easiest and fastest form ever thanks to
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good
inventions and developments.
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So
in this modern time it is inevitable to
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get
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information
from variety of sources and our job is
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just
to limit and select the amount and
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subject
of them in the way we want and need it.
For instance
, there are
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plenty
of scientific TV programs and it is
really
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hard
task to choose our favorite and essential ones.

Moreover
, nowadays everyone has
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some
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skills
and abilities
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so
we should compare each other to
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get
better situation in every issue including job or education. This may force us to desire getting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
in every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
even irrelevant ones to our field.
For example
, a person who
is graduated
in mechanical engineering should expand his
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skills
in other
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areas
like computer sciences and English language
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because
employers
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expect
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some
experts with high command in all
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areas
.
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But
the key point here is considering the capacity and efficiency of our mind.

Scientists believe that
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people
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can&
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subjects
in various
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areas
and
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fields and
they will forget the
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information
which they
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don&
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use
in their daily life.
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So
it is
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just
wasting our time to
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unnecessary
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information
which we
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don&
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need and
we
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make
any improvement in our life using them. Meanwhile,
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because
our knowledge is
superficially
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so
we
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aren&
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areas
and
consequently
they will
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add
us nothing.

As far
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I&
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it&
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get
a
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very
deep understanding in a certain
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subject
rather
than getting
superficially
knowledge in a vast variety of
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subjects
. This is the better option
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because
by this way we can focus and concentrate on a specific matter and our brain can organize
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information
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very
well.
Finally
, I
deeply
believe that unnecessary
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information
will
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just
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make
our brain busy and will decrease its performance.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 12 Task 2 it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
402 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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