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If you unexpectedly receive a large amount of money, what will you do withit? Would you spend it for practical purposes or simply for fun? State youropinion and explain your reasons. v.1

If you unexpectedly receive a large amount of money, what will you do withit? Would you spend it for practical purposes or simply for fun? State youropinion and explain your reasons. v. 1
In many metropolises, older buildings are torn down to make way for newer buildings, as well as to make up for the tight space and as a way to advance into the modern world. There are a few downsides to replacing older buildings, albeit there are some benefits as well. One drawback to getting rid of older buildings is that the city might lose a piece of its history. Take for example, an old building used to be famous for being the first theatre in the country, so this definitely offers historical value to the city. If this were to be torn down, the city might not only lose its history, but also its identity. Furthermore, people from around the world may be interested to visit the building, therefore boosting the economy. Tearing down older buildings might rid people of the opportunity to learn about the city's history, thus may eventually negatively impact the city's tourism. Another disadvantage is demolishing older buildings and building a new one may be labour extensive. This can definitely cost a substantial amount of money. For instance, planning and constructing a new building might cost up to millions of dollars. This does not only impact the city's economy, it is also negatively affecting the city's budget. To illustrate, if most of the city's annual budget is spent on making a new building, the budget allocated for health care might be reduced. On the other hand, one of the main benefits of replacing older buildings with new ones is newer buildings may improve the city's scenery and landscape. In other words, instead of having a dilapidated building in the middle of the city, a new building can offer a fresher perspective. Moreover, new buildings fit in with the advancement towards the modern world, and shows that a city is flourishing. In conclusion, even though newer buildings give the city a fresh look, the drawbacks of tearing down older buildings to make way for new ones such as the city losing its historical value and it being an expensive project outweigh this benefit. Therefore, the city should come up with a compromise to resolve this issue, such as renovating older buildings instead.
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are torn
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up for the tight space and as a way to advance into the modern world. There are a few downsides to replacing
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older
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, albeit there are
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some
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as well
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One drawback to getting rid of
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older
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buildings
is that the city
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might
lose a piece of its history. Take
for example
, an
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for being the
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this definitely offers historical value to the city. If this were to
be torn
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, the city
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lose its history,
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also
its identity.
Furthermore
,
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people
from around the world may
be interested
to visit the
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building
,
therefore
boosting the economy. Tearing
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down
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older
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rid
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people
of the opportunity to learn about the city's history,
thus
may
eventually
negatively
impact the city's tourism.

Another disadvantage is demolishing
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older
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and
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building
a
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new
one may be
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extensive. This can definitely cost a substantial amount of money.
For instance
, planning and constructing a
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new
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building
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might
cost up to millions of dollars. This does not
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only
impact the city's economy, it is
also
negatively
affecting the city's budget. To illustrate, if most of the city's annual budget
is spent
on making a
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new
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building
, the budget allocated for health care
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might
be
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reduced
.

On the other hand
, one of the main benefits of replacing
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older
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buildings
with
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ones
is newer
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improve
the city's scenery and landscape.
In other words
,
instead
of having a dilapidated
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building
in the middle of the city, a
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new
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building
can offer a fresher perspective.
Moreover
,
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new
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buildings
fit in with the advancement towards the modern world, and
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shows
that a city is flourishing.

In conclusion
,
even though
newer
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buildings
give the city a fresh look, the drawbacks of tearing
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down
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older
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buildings
to
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make
way for
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new
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ones
such as the city losing its historical value and it being an expensive project outweigh this benefit.
Therefore
, the city should
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come
up with a compromise to resolve this issue, such as renovating
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older
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buildings
instead
.
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IELTS essay If you unexpectedly receive a large amount of money, what will you do withit? Would you spend it for practical purposes or simply for fun? State youropinion and explain your reasons. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
365 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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