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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Please give specificreasons for your opinion. Parents should restrict the TV programs that arewatched by their kids instead of letting the kids watch TV programs freely. v.91

Please give specificreasons for your opinion. Parents should restrict the TV programs that arewatched by their kids instead of letting the kids watch TV programs freely. v. 91
It is thought by some that it is the responsibility of parents to show their offspring how an honest member of society is to behave, while others feel that this should happen at school. This essay believes that although parents can encourage this type of behaviour from an early age, a school is better because it can reach every child. Parents have access to their children from birth and in these formative years the children can easily be taught to understand the need to obey rules and respect others. Young children assimilate concepts easily; therefore the onus should be on parents to make sure that this happens. For example, a case study in the UK showed that 90% of children who were well-behaved when starting school were still well-behaved at 18. This essay, however, believes that this will only affect the children whose parents have high moral standards. Schools, on the other hand, can implement an ethics syllabus which is studied by every child. Regardless of a student’s background, each one of them must attend the same lessons, meaning they will all see how they are expected to behave and what role themselves Will play in their world. For instance, Ireland has seen a downward trend in the number of young offenders since introducing ethics classes 16 years ago. This essay, therefore argues that, because of the consistency found in education, school is the best place for learning social values. In conclusion, for children to become upstanding members of society, although they can benefit from the early exposure of parental guidance, this essay believes that the objective teachings in school are more valuable and so should be favoured.
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some
that it is the responsibility of
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parents
to
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show
their offspring how an honest member of society is to behave, while others feel that this should happen at
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school
. This
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essay
believes that although
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parents
can encourage this type of
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behaviour
from an early age, a
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school
is better
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because
it can reach every child.

Parents have access to their
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children
from birth and in these formative years the
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children
can
easily
be taught
to understand the need to obey
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rules
and respect others. Young
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children
assimilate concepts
easily
;
therefore
the onus should be on
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parents
to
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make
sure that this happens.
For example
, a case study in the UK
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showed
that 90% of
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children
who were well-behaved when starting
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school
were
still
well-behaved at 18. This
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essay
,
however
, believes that this will
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only
affect the
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children
whose
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parents
have high moral standards.

Schools,
on the other hand
, can implement an ethics syllabus which
is studied
by every child. Regardless of a student’s background, each one of them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
attend the same lessons, meaning they will all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
how they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to behave and what role themselves

Will play in their world.
For instance
, Ireland has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
a downward trend in the number of young offenders since introducing ethics classes 16 years ago. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
essay
,
therefore
argues that,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the consistency found in education,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
is the best place for learning social values.

In conclusion
, for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to become upstanding members of society, although they can benefit from the early exposure of parental guidance, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
essay
believes that the objective teachings in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
are more valuable and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
should be
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favoured
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Please give specificreasons for your opinion. Parents should restrict the TV programs that arewatched by their kids instead of letting the kids watch TV programs freely. v. 91

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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