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if you don’t make sure that other people (especially influential people or your employer) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life. v.1

if you don’t make sure that other people (especially influential people or your employer) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life. v. 1
Nowadays, people learn countless skills in schools or in universities in order to become prepared for their future job. However, some people have problems showing what they are able to do. They might think that introducing them as an ostentatious person is not necessary, or it may change others’ attitude towards them by. I personally believe that if someone is not able to show his abilities, he cannot be successful in life. In what follows, I will try to pinpoint the most outstanding reasons. First, one should bear in mind that in today’s world, it is so easy for employers to find a person with a required skill. So someone in a job can easily be replaced by someone else provided that he doesn’t distinguish himself properly. To illustrate this, suppose an employee working for a big company who has numerous skills related to his tasks, but he is not able to use them in practice. Such companies are always bombarded with lots of job requests by other unemployed persons. So it’s obvious that his boss will soon decide to substitute him with the one who he thinks is better whenever he feels the current employee doesn’t do well in his tasks. Secondly, being sure that others are aware of one’s talents and strengths, has a great impact on his self-confidence. Knowing the fact that others believe a person’s abilities and observing their praises can induce him to think that he can do well in his job. one can also be encouraged to improve his skills in order to attract more attentions from his boss for instance. So this can undoubtedly enhance the quality of his work as well as increasing his self-esteem. Finally, someone, who can show the abilities he has, obtains the opportunity to be offered more jobs. So it provides a variety of choices which lead to a favorable choice and thus a successful future. A relevant study recently conducted in my country reveals that getting successful in a job, has a direct relation with the amount of satisfaction that the person derives from the job. To sum up, the aforementioned reasons lead us to this conclusion that no matter how much a person is dexterous in a task, if he cannot show those abilities, he cannot be successful in future. Considering this fact, I strongly suggest that some basic instructions relevant to this issue be taught in schools in addition to required skills. This will undoubtedly help the next generation overcome this issue. In addition, it might be worthy for people having this problem to attend special classes in which a psychologist tries to help them overwhelm the mentioned problem.
Nowadays,
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people
learn countless
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skills
in schools or in universities in order to become prepared for their future
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job
.
However
,
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people
have problems showing what they are able to do. They might
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think
that introducing them as an ostentatious
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person
is not necessary, or it may
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change
others’ attitude towards them by. I
personally
believe that if
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someone
is not able to
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show
his
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abilities
, he cannot be
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successful
in life. In what follows, I will try to pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.

First
, one should bear in mind that in
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today
’s world, it is
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so
easy for employers to find a
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person
with a required
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skill
.
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So
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someone
in a
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job
can
easily
be replaced
by
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someone
else provided that he doesn’t distinguish himself
properly
. To illustrate this, suppose an employee working for a
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big
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company
who has numerous
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skills
related to his tasks,
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but
he is not able to
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use
them in practice. Such
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companies
are always bombarded with lots of
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job
requests by
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other
unemployed
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persons
.
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it’s obvious that his boss will
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soon
decide to substitute him with the one who he
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thinks
is better whenever he feels the
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current
employee doesn’t do well in his tasks.

Secondly
, being sure that others are aware of one’s talents and strengths, has a great impact on his self-confidence. Knowing the fact that others believe a
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person’s
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abilities
and observing their praises can induce him to
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think
that he can do well in his
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job
.
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one
can
also
be encouraged
to
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improve
his
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skills
in order to attract more attentions from his boss
for instance
.
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So
this can
undoubtedly
enhance the quality of his work
as well
as increasing his self-esteem.

Finally
,
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someone
, who can
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show
the
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abilities
he has, obtains the opportunity to
be offered
more
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jobs
.
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So
it provides a variety of choices which lead to a favorable choice and
thus
a
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successful
future. A relevant study recently conducted in my country reveals that getting
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successful
in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
, has a direct relation with the amount of satisfaction that the
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person
derives from the job.

To sum up, the aforementioned reasons lead us to this conclusion that no matter how much a
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person
is dexterous in a task, if he cannot
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show
those
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abilities
, he cannot be
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successful
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in future
. Considering this fact, I
strongly
suggest that
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some
basic instructions relevant to this issue
be taught
in schools
in addition
to required
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skills
. This will
undoubtedly
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help
the
next
generation overcome this issue.
In addition
, it might be worthy for
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people
having this problem to attend special classes in which a psychologist tries to
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help
them overwhelm the mentioned problem.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay if you don’t make sure that other people (especially influential people or your employer) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
444 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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