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if a product is good or it meets ppeoples needs. people will but it. advertising is no more than a form of entertainment. to what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

if a product is good or it meets ppeoples needs. people will but it. advertising is no more than a form of entertainment. v. 1
According to some person's advertisement is just a trailer to entertain people and plays no role in selling items as they would only purchase the items which are useful and accomplishes the requirements. I disagree with this notion as the commercials play an important role in making a brand popular and increase its sale. The key feature of promoting a product is via advertisements as modern media has flourished so much that it has become like a member of the family. So whatever the media will promote, people will start purchasing and using it. For example, few products have been linked with the names of famous celebrities and this has been possible through heavy payments which the manufacturers of brand have made to them. People now have become brand conscious and are willing to pay any amount of money to get the product and this has been possible through effective commercials which are entertaining as well productive for selling the items. The fact that advertisements play an important role in selling of products is evident from the fact that while the product is being launched or prepared, a portion of the budget is allocated to its marketing. This marketing is an essential part and few companies would even compromise the quality of commodity for the sake of promoting via advertisements and pay heavy amounts to famous celebrities for the sake of promotion. The presence of these famous figures in commercials make the products attractive for purchase and palatable for consumption. In conclusion, advertisements are not just entertainment, but play an important part in the increased sale of a brand.
According to
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some
person's
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advertisement
is
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just
a trailer to entertain
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people
and
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plays
no role in selling items as they would
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only
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purchase
the items which are useful and accomplishes the requirements. I disagree with this notion as the commercials
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play
an
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important
role in making a
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brand
popular and increase its sale.

The key feature of promoting a
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product
is via
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advertisements
as modern media has flourished
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so
much that it has become like a member of the family.
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So
whatever the media will promote,
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people
will
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start
purchasing and using it.
For example
, few
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products
have
been linked
with the names of
Consider using "celebrities".
famous celebrities
and this has been possible through heavy payments which the manufacturers of
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brand
have made to them.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
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now
have become
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brand
conscious and are willing to pay any amount of money to
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get
the
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product
and this has been possible through effective commercials which are entertaining
as well
productive for selling the items.

The fact that
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advertisements
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play
an
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important
role in selling of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
is evident from the fact that while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
is
being launched
or prepared, a portion of the budget
is allocated
to its marketing. This marketing is an essential part and few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
would even compromise the quality of commodity for the sake of promoting via
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
and pay heavy amounts to
Consider using "celebrities".
famous celebrities
for the sake of promotion. The presence of these
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
figures in commercials
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
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products
attractive for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
and palatable for consumption.

In conclusion
,
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advertisements
are not
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just
entertainment,
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but
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play
an
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important
part in the increased sale of a
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brand
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay if a product is good or it meets ppeoples needs. people will but it. advertising is no more than a form of entertainment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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