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In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co educational or mixed schools Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single sex schools To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co educational or mixed schools Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single sex schools v. 2
it is sometimes argued in every part of the world, educating boys and girls joined in a co-educational or mixed schools. Few believe, there are more opportunities as well as in career growth if they are educated in differently such as single sex schools. I do not believe dividing them into two types of school is an effective way for children. On the one hand, mixed school has a negative impact on the educational system. Firstly, there is a misconception in public schools, female undergraduates are not allowed to play in the sporting events. For example games such as, football, basket ball is only for boys. Therefore, it was an assumption by female undergraduates they are dominated by male counterparts if studied together. Secondly, children of their age easily fall in love and spoil their career. For instance, when I was in my eighth standard, a girl aborted twice, In contrast when studied in single sex schools such circumstances may not arise. As a result, students studying in single-sex schools are more benefitted than mixed schools education. On the other hand, co-education helps students to excel in their careers. In mixed schools as they study together can benefit both in future. children can talk to each other and solve their problems together. Participation in debates, help each other in future. For example, the working culture in a corporate environment is as a team. These schools help them working together, where as, in contrast children in single-sex schools will help to work in such environment. To Conclude, though there are positive impacts in single-sex schools for female compared to male. mixed schools would help children to do better in future. I believe in the disadvantages outweigh advantages in this scenario.
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joined
in a co-educational or
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mixed
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schools
. Few believe, there are more opportunities
as well
as in career growth if they
are educated
in
differently
such as single sex
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schools
. I do not believe dividing them into two types of
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school
is an effective way for children.

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mixed
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school
has a
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negative
impact on the educational system.
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, there is a misconception in public
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schools
, female undergraduates are not
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allowed
to play in the sporting
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events
.
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games such as, football, basket ball is
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only
for boys.
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, it was an assumption by female undergraduates they
are dominated
by male counterparts if studied together.
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,
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children
of their age
easily
fall in
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love
and spoil their career.
For instance
, when I was in my eighth standard, a girl aborted twice,
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when studied in single sex
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schools
such circumstances may not arise.
As a result
, students studying in single-sex
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are more
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education.

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helps
students to excel in their careers. In
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as they study together can benefit both
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in future
.
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children
can talk to each other and solve their problems together. Participation in debates,
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help
each other
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in future
.
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, the working culture in a corporate environment is as a team. These
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help
them
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working
together,
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in single-sex
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will
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help
to work in such environment.

To Conclude
, though there are
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impacts in single-sex
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for female compared to male.
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mixed
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schools
would
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help
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children
to do better
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in future
. I believe in the disadvantages outweigh advantages in this scenario.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co educational or mixed schools Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single sex schools v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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