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where do i live? Do you think it is interesting to live there? Do you usually wear watch? Do you think time management is important? Why do you think people like to wear an elegant watch? Have you ever received a watch as a gift? Are you ever late for anything? v.1

where do i live? Do you think it is interesting to live there? Do you usually wear watch? Do you think time management is important? Why do you think people like to wear an elegant watch? Have you ever received a watch as a gift? Are you ever late for anything? v. 1
For ages, people have been presenting gifts as a gesture of love, good will and affection towards their loved ones. However, in modern times, many would argue that such practices lead to wastage of money as the gifts presented, to the close relatives, often tend to be less useful to them. In my opinion, this is true and strongly agree that items should not be gifted to anyone, despite of its symbolic meaning. Traditionally, presenting gifts and other valuable items has been considered as a way of expressing ones loves and affection towards the recipient, while some even gifting to show their appreciation for the person's hard work. For example, parents often gift their children with some sort of toys during their birthdays to express love, while the teacher would present something as a token of appreciation to its students for their hard work. Despite of its symbolic standing, many avoid gifting items to friends and family. In modern times, where everyone is familiar with online shopping, many purchase things which they feel are essential for them. This makes selecting something to be presented as a gift, difficult, as the presenter is unaware of the recipient's needs; leading to wastage of money. Due to this, in many of the weddings that I was invited, the host specifically mentions, not to bring gifts, in the invitation itself. In conclusion, in spite of the value that it holds and the message it conveys while presenting, a loved one, with a gift is outweighed by the difficulty in choosing the right item. Hence in my opinion, I strongly agree that people should not be encouraged to give gifts to close ones as the gift may be rendered useless to the recipient and ultimately lead to wastage of money.
For ages,
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people
have been presenting
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gifts
as a gesture of
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love
,
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good
will and affection towards their
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loved
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ones
.
However
, in modern times,
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many
would argue that such practices lead to wastage of money as the
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gifts
presented, to the close relatives,
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often
tend to be less useful to them. In my opinion, this is true and
strongly
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agree
that
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items
should not
be gifted
to anyone,
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
its symbolic meaning.

Traditionally
, presenting
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gifts
and other valuable
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items
has
been considered
as a way of expressing
Did you mean "one's"?
ones
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loves
and affection towards the recipient, while
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some
even gifting to
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show
their appreciation for the person's
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hard
work.
For example
, parents
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often
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gift
their children with
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some
sort of toys during their birthdays to express
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love
, while the teacher would present something as a token of appreciation to its students for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
its symbolic standing,
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many
avoid gifting
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items
to friends and family.

In modern times, where everyone is familiar with online shopping,
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many
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purchase
things which they feel are essential for them.
Did you mean "these"?
This
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makes
selecting something to
be presented
as a
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gift
, difficult, as the presenter is unaware of the recipient's needs; leading to wastage of money. Due to this, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of the weddings that I
was invited
, the host
specifically
mentions, not to bring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gifts
, in the invitation itself.

In conclusion
,
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in spite of
the value that it holds and the message it conveys while presenting, a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
one, with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
is outweighed
by the difficulty in choosing the right
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item
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
in my opinion, I
strongly
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agree
that
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people
should not
be encouraged
to give
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gifts
to close
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gift
may
be rendered
useless to the recipient and
ultimately
lead to wastage of money.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay where do i live? Do you think it is interesting to live there? Do you usually wear watch? Do you think time management is important? Why do you think people like to wear an elegant watch? Have you ever received a watch as a gift? Are you ever late for anything? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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