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Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v.1

Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1
Recently, it has been observed that experienced people are competing with the young people for the same job in the company. In this essay, I intend to delve into the reasons behind this fierce competition and advice solution that companies can adopt. First of all, experienced persons are considered as an asset to an organisation because of their rich years of working and skills they have gained over a period of time. Many times because of their experience and skills, they solved critical situations and won projects for their organisation, which is almost impossible for the inexperienced person, as they have just joined it and don't have required experience and skills to get them involved in decision making. That is why, organisations always employ the senior people for critical positions in the company. To add further, senior people are more mature, calm and polite and are in a better position to deal with rude customers as compared to young people who are aggressive in nature and can make the matter worse. Although, young people have less experience and skills, but, they are energetic and vibrant and organisations make sure that under the leadership of trustworthy mentor they can develop their skills and contribute towards an organisation's growth. To conclude, although mature people have a deep understanding of the business and better decision making and problem solving skills, but the role of young people is equally important and the business should assign them a senior mentor for their overall growth in the company.
Recently, it has
been observed
that experienced
people
are competing with the
young
people
for the same job in the
company
. In this essay, I intend to delve into the reasons behind this fierce competition and advice solution that
companies
can adopt.

First of all
, experienced persons
are considered
as an asset to an
organisation
because
of their rich years of working and
skills
they have gained over a period of time.
Many
times
because
of their experience and
skills
, they solved critical situations and won projects for their
organisation
, which is almost impossible for the inexperienced person, as they have
just
joined
it and don't have required experience and
skills
to
get
them involved in
decision making
.
That is
why,
organisations
always employ the senior
people
for critical positions in the
company
.

To
add
further
, senior
people
are more mature, calm and polite and are in a better position to deal with rude customers as compared to
young
people
who are aggressive in nature and can
make
the matter worse. Although,
young
people
have less experience and
skills
,
but
, they are energetic and vibrant and
organisations
make
sure that under the leadership of trustworthy mentor they can develop their
skills
and contribute towards an
organisation
's growth.

To conclude
, although mature
people
have a deep understanding of the business and better
decision making
and problem solving
skills
,
but
the role of
young
people
is
equally
important
and the business should assign them a senior mentor for their
overall
growth in the
company
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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