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House is the starting place of love hope and dreams. There is an ideological verbalisation that the magic thing about home is that it feels good to leave; it feels even better to come back. Although renting a house does not bring any monetary benefits to v.1

House is the starting place of love hope and dreams. There is an ideological verbalisation that the magic thing about home is that it feels good to leave; it feels even better to come back. Although renting a house does not bring any monetary benefits to v. 1
In modern society, health specialists in different parts of the world say that people are not doing enough physical activities because they do not have a lot of time. Actually, it can be avoided, if physical performance will be the compulsory part in the job place or in the learning institution. One of the main reasons why people not doing too much exercise because they do not have a lot of time. We are more concentrated on our studies or spending too much time in the workplace. It is because of advantages which can be a reason for a better career or a good mark. For instance, a recent study found that people after their work are very tired and in order to rest, they prefer to have some entertainment activities, rather do physical exercise. A lack of physical activity leads to a range of serious problems, so it is important that this issue is solved. One possible solution is when the school or the job management team will launch a mandatory physical education program. This program should be short, so it will not affect the educational or work process. For example, according to the research, spending at least 15 minutes for physical activity will decrease the chance of heart attack. In Conclusion, we do not do a lot of physical exercise and the reason for that is our busy lifestyle such as a school or office. If our main activity will be accompanied by physical study, we can avoid such a problem.
In modern society, health specialists in
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different
parts of the world say that
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people
are not doing
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enough
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physical
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activities
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because
they do not have
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a lot of
time. Actually, it can
be avoided
, if
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physical
performance will be the compulsory part in the job place or in the learning institution.

One of the main reasons why
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people
not doing too much exercise
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they do not have
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a lot of
time. We are more concentrated on our studies or spending too much time in the workplace. It is
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because
of advantages which can be a reason for a better career or a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
mark.
For instance
, a recent study found that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
after their work are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
tired and in order to rest, they prefer to have
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some
entertainment
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activities
,
rather
do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
exercise.

A lack of
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physical
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activity
leads to a range of serious problems,
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so
it is
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important
that this issue
is solved
. One possible solution is when the school or the job management team will launch a mandatory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
education program. This program should be short,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it will not affect the educational or work process.
For example
, according to the research, spending at least 15 minutes for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activity
will decrease the chance of heart attack.

In Conclusion
, we do not do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
exercise and the reason for
that is
our busy lifestyle such as a school or office. If our main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activity
will
be accompanied
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
physical
study, we can avoid such a problem.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay House is the starting place of love hope and dreams. There is an ideological verbalisation that the magic thing about home is that it feels good to leave; it feels even better to come back. Although renting a house does not bring any monetary benefits to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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