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In some countries, people prefer to rent a house for accommodation, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. Does renting a house have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house? v.1

In some countries, people prefer to rent a house for accommodation, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. Does renting a house have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house? v. 1
Selecting a place to live in and whether to rent it or own it is a big decision to make. Many people prefer to own a house rather than living in a rented apartment while there are others who choose to do exactly the opposite. I believe that owning a house has far more advantages than renting an apartment. To begin with, people often rent a house because purchasing a property requires a great deal of money and the skyrocketing price in big cities makes it impossible for many to even dream to own a house. These people naturally rent an apartment. There are certain advantages of living in a rented apartment. First of all, the person does not have to pay a huge sum of money at a time and does not need to pay taxes and bear the costs of maintenance. Moreover, such people can change the living place based on the location of their workplace and children’s school. The renovation of the apartment is the landlord’s responsibility and the tenants do not need to worry about it. On the contrary, owning a house gives a sense of personal achievement that tenants cannot enjoy. A house is a permanent asset and with time its price increases. The landlord can rent the house and this can be a steady source of earning for him. Furthermore, being the owner of a house means there is no one over the shoulder to watch what someone is doing and no sudden notice for evacuation. For instance, we had to vacant our apartment all of a sudden at least thrice until we purchased our own house a decade earlier. This is a great freedom which only house owners have. Besides, the owner can construct the house the way he likes and enjoy open space, garden, and other facilities in the house. To conclude, renting a flat has some benefits but the overall freedom and monetary compensations house owners enjoy are far significant and this is why every tenant dreams to own a house someday.
Selecting a place to
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live
in and whether to
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rent
it or
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own
it is a
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big
decision to
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make
.
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Many
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people
prefer to
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own
a
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house
rather
than living in a rented
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apartment
while there are others who choose to do exactly the opposite. I believe that owning a
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house
has far more advantages than renting an apartment.

To
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begin
with,
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people
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often
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rent
a
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house
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because
purchasing a property requires a great deal of money and the skyrocketing price in
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big
cities
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makes
it impossible for
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many
to even dream to
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own
a
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house
. These
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people
naturally
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rent
an
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apartment
. There are certain advantages of living in a rented
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apartment
.
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First of all
, the person does not
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have to
pay a huge sum of money at a time and does not need to pay taxes and bear the costs of maintenance.
Moreover
, such
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people
can
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change
the living place based on the location of their workplace and children’s school. The renovation of the
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apartment
is the landlord’s responsibility and the tenants do not need to worry about it.

On the contrary
, owning a
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house
gives a sense of personal achievement that tenants cannot enjoy. A
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house
is a permanent asset and with time its price increases. The landlord can
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rent
the
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house
and this can be a steady source of earning for him.
Furthermore
, being the
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owner
of a
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house
means there is no one over the shoulder to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
what someone is doing and no sudden notice for evacuation.
For instance
, we had to vacant our
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apartment
all of a sudden at least thrice until we
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purchased
our
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own
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house
a decade earlier. This is a great freedom which
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only
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house
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owners
have.
Besides
, the
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owner
can construct the
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house
the way he likes and enjoy open space, garden, and other facilities in the
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house
.

To conclude
, renting a flat has
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some
benefits
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but
the
overall
freedom and monetary compensations
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house
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owners
enjoy are far significant and this is why every tenant dreams to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
a
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house
someday.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries, people prefer to rent a house for accommodation, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. Does renting a house have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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