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Critical Period It is generally believed that for many organisms, there is a specific time period, a so-called “window of opportunity, ” during which the organism must receive crucial input from its environment in order for normal development to occur. v.1

Critical Period It is generally believed that for many organisms, there is a specific time period, a so-called “window of opportunity, ” during which the organism must receive crucial input from its environment in order for normal development to occur. v. 1
People have different views weather save of environment are under responsibility of government or of people. In my opinion, while individuals have some responsibility, prior duty is belong to the government. To start with, each person has responsibility to protect the environment and decrease the carbon print. The carbon print has decreased than solve the many environmental problems in all over the country. Beside this, people are not protecting the environment and use the more plastic bags in everyday. After use this plastic bag, then throughout and burning. This situation has created many air problems and water problems. For instance, there are many factories make many plastic bags in everyday. Because of this, people do not use the plastic bags and use more and more clothes bag. While, use clothes, bags the environment or saving came in the next generation. On the other hand, even individual's role is important, without government force is impossible to sustain better environment. Government should decrease the factories because the factories has produced waste water where the motherland, water and air also polluted in day by day. Therefore, the government should apply the higher taxes on those factories who are producing more waste materials. Moreover, the government should apply the strict rules to ban the plastic bags. Should compulsory for all the over the country, not use the plastic bags. If using the plastic bag an individual then they pay the fine whereas government says that. In conclusion, although it is important to take place in environment safe as an natives or government responsibility are higher. Do not cut the trees in the Forest or home so that environment safe.
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. In my opinion, while individuals have
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, prior duty is
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.

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responsibility
to protect the
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environment
and decrease the carbon print. The carbon print has decreased than solve the
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many
environmental problems in all over the country. Beside this,
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people
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environment
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, then throughout and burning. This situation has created
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air problems and water problems.
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in
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. While,
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, even individual's role is
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, without
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force is impossible to sustain better
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environment
.
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should decrease the
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factories
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factories
has produced waste water where the motherland, water and air
also
polluted in day by day.
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, the
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government
should apply the higher taxes on those
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factories
who are producing more waste materials.
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, the
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government
should apply the strict
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rules
to ban the
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plastic
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bags
. Should compulsory for all the over the country, not
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use
the
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plastic
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bags
. If using the
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plastic
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bag
an individual then they pay the fine whereas
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government
says that.

In conclusion
, although it is
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environment
safe as
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are higher. Do not
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cut
the trees in the Forest or home
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that
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environment
safe.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Critical Period It is generally believed that for many organisms, there is a specific time period, a so-called “window of opportunity, ” during which the organism must receive crucial input from its environment in order for normal development to occur. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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