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77. If you are asked by your teacher to do community service, which of the following would you choose? Explain why. 1. helping children with their homework 2. teaching adults to use the computer 3. cleaning city park v.1

77. If you are asked by your teacher to do community service, which of the following would you choose? Explain why. 1. helping children with their homework 2. teaching adults to use the computer 3. cleaning city park v. 1
In over the past couple of decades, innovation has drastically changed the way we socialize as humans. Some people believe that this has improved our ability to interact but others disagree. In my opinion, while the development of some electronic devices, when put to proper use, can be very helpful in interacting, it can actually make us less willing to relate with others. People who believe recent technological advancement has improved social skills argue that it has made the world a global village. This makes it possible for friends and families at the extreme spectrum of the world to communicate with each other. It has basically taken away the physical barrier that might be created as a result of geographical location. For instance, I was able to talk to my wife via video calls while I was in a foreign country on an official assignment. This would not have been possible without the help of a smartphone that had the capabilities to connect us. Conversely, the advent of mobile phones and other gadgets has some people, especially youths, detached from their immediate society. This is because they tend to spend so much time on their phones going through entertaining content on social media. In fact, it is almost becoming an epidemic and addiction amongst young people. Most of them struggle to maintain a conversion with their peers when they are at social gatherings and would rather just press their phones. In conclusion, although computers have made communication over long distance very easy, I am of the view that their development as a whole has been detrimental to our social skills.
In over the past couple of decades, innovation has
drastically
changed
the way we socialize as humans.
Some
people
believe that this has
improved
our ability to interact
but
others disagree. In my opinion, while the development of
some
electronic devices, when put to proper
use
, can be
very
helpful in interacting, it can actually
make
us less willing to relate with others.

People
who believe recent technological advancement has
improved
social
skills
argue that it has made the world a global village. This
makes
it possible for friends and families at the extreme spectrum of the world to communicate with each other. It has
basically
taken away the physical barrier that might
be created
as a result
of geographical location.
For instance
, I was able to talk to my wife via video calls while I was in a foreign country on an official assignment. This would not have been possible without the
help
of a smartphone that had the capabilities to connect us.

Conversely
, the advent of mobile phones and other gadgets has
some
people
,
especially
youths, detached from their immediate society. This is
because
they tend to spend
so
much time on their phones going through entertaining content on
social
media. In fact, it is almost becoming an epidemic and addiction amongst young
people
. Most of them struggle to maintain a conversion with their peers when they are at
social
gatherings and would
rather
just
press their phones.

In conclusion
, although computers have made communication over long distance
very
easy, I am of the view that their development as a whole has been detrimental to our
social
skills
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 77. If you are asked by your teacher to do community service, which of the following would you choose? Explain why. 1. helping children with their homework 2. teaching adults to use the computer 3. cleaning city park v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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