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Hosting sporting events such as the Olympics and the World Cup can bring benefits to the host countries. How far do you agree with this statement? Use your own examples to support. v.1

Hosting sporting events such as the Olympics and the World Cup can bring benefits to the host countries. How far Use your own examples to support. v. 1
The importance of hosting Major sports title events such as Olympics and World cup, which was debatable, has now become more controversial. It has both positive and negative effects on citizens, especially city dwellers where the event is going to be hosted. In my opinion, the former proposition appears to be more rational. This essay will further elaborate both sides of the argument before reaching to an appropriate conclusion. There are myriad reasons to support this argument but the most conspicuous one stems from the fact that such major events bring employments to many native people. For example, electricians, architects and many other occupations are required to create such a big event. Last year's event organizer report said that local businesses had seen a rise of 25% in the months of Olympic 2018 event held at Delhi, India. There are some pitfalls to negate this argument as well. The alarming concern was that big events create chaos in the routine lives of citizens. To exemplify, diversions of roads to navigate traffic create hassles to many individuals. Moreover, this event requires a large number of natural resources such as water and fuels. For example, Mumbai has suffered from a drought last year during a time of the hosting of IPL event. So that becomes a controversial issue during that time. According to the arguments aforementioned above, I can reach a conclusion that the positive impact of hosting gigantic events can bring prosperity to the city. However. it has a number of drawbacks that should be well handled.
The importance of hosting Major sports title
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such as Olympics and World cup, which was debatable, has
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become more controversial. It has both
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positive
and
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negative
effects on citizens,
especially
city dwellers where the
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event
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be hosted
. In my opinion, the former proposition appears to be more rational. This essay will
further
elaborate both sides of the
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argument
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before
reaching to an appropriate conclusion.

There are myriad reasons to support this
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argument
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but
the most conspicuous one stems from the fact that such major
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events
bring employments to
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many
native
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people
.
For example
, electricians, architects and
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many
other occupations
are required
to create such a
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big
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event
. Last year's
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event
organizer report said that local businesses had
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seen
a rise of 25% in the months of Olympic 2018
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event
held at Delhi, India.

There are
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some
pitfalls to negate this
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argument
as well
. The alarming concern was that
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big
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events
create chaos in the routine
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lives
of citizens. To exemplify, diversions of roads to navigate traffic create hassles to
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many
individuals.
Moreover
, this
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event
requires
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a large number of
natural resources such as water and fuels.
For example
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IPL
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.
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becomes a controversial issue during that time.

According to the
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arguments
aforementioned above, I can reach a conclusion that the
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positive
impact of hosting gigantic
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events
can bring prosperity to the city.
However
.
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has a number of drawbacks that should be well handled.
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IELTS essay Hosting sporting events such as the Olympics and the World Cup can bring benefits to the host countries. How far Use your own examples to support. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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