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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.4

Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. v. 4
Over the past few years, there is a great competition to host international sporting events. These events, typically, are held every three or four years and a large number of people travel across the world to support their team during the event. While a sizable number of people believe that the price involved in hosting such events is worthwhile, but others claim that it could have dire consequences and perhaps not every country should try and stage international sporting events. There are some arguments in favour of hosting international sporting events. Firstly, the host country is in the limelight in the world and can enhance their image, and in turn benefit from the potential tourism industry. Mega sports events attract a vast number foreign visitors, which promotes retail trade and boost the economy. For instance, in the Football world cup event that was held in 2018, tourists who were coming to the host country spent a sizable amount of their money on accommodation, travel, entertainment and foods, which means that it has generated more revenue for the local businesses and for the government through taxes. Secondly, people who live in the host country that are influenced by highly publicized events are more likely to take part in sport on a regular basis. Therefore, this happen is beneficial for both society and individuals. Furthermore, since the host country need to modern and equipped sport facilities, it is a big chance to renovate infrastructure and build the arenas. On the other hand, the major argument against hosting international sporting events is financial. Hosting events like the World Cup may result in the country incurring huge debts. Indeed, the money spent on state-of-the-art stadiums and arenas would be better spent on education programs, welfare and health services. In addition, if the event is not well organized are more likely to the image of the host nation would be tarnished. To sum up, it is an honour for a country holding an international sporting event and would have its own positive and negative sides. In my personal opinion, I believe that the benefits of hosting the event are greater than the drawbacks.
Over the past few years, there is a great competition to
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host
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international
sporting
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events
. These
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events
,
typically
,
are held
every three or four years and
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a large number of
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people
travel across the
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world
to support their team during the
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event
. While a sizable number of
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people
believe that the price involved in
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hosting
such
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events
is worthwhile,
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but
others claim that it could have dire consequences and perhaps not every
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country
should
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try and
stage
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international
sporting
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events
.

There are
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some
arguments in
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favour
of
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hosting
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international
sporting
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events
.
Firstly
, the
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host
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country
is in the limelight in the
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world
and can enhance their image, and in turn benefit from the potential tourism industry. Mega sports
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events
attract a vast number foreign visitors, which promotes retail trade and boost the economy.
For instance
, in the Football
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world
cup
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event
that
was held
in 2018, tourists who were coming to the
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host
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country
spent a sizable amount of their money on accommodation, travel, entertainment and foods, which means that it has generated more revenue for the local businesses and for the
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government
through taxes.
Secondly
,
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people
who
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live
in the
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host
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country
that
are influenced
by
highly
publicized
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events
are more likely to
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take part
in sport on a regular basis.
Therefore
,
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this happen
is beneficial for both society and individuals.
Furthermore
, since the
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host
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country
need to modern and equipped sport facilities, it is a
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big
chance to renovate infrastructure and build the arenas.

On the other hand
, the major argument against
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hosting
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international
sporting
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is financial.
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Hosting
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events
like the
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World
Cup may result in the
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country
incurring huge debts.
Indeed
, the money spent on state-of-the-art stadiums and arenas would be better spent on education programs, welfare and health services.
In addition
, if the
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event
is not well organized are more likely to the image of the
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host
nation would
be tarnished
.

To sum up, it is an
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honour
for a
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country
holding an
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sporting
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event
and would have its
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own
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positive
and
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sides. In my personal opinion, I believe that the benefits of
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hosting
the
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are greater than the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. v. 4

Essay
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358 words
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