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FAMILY Describe your family? Do you have a large or small family? How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family? Do you get along well with your family? Are people i v.1

FAMILY Describe your family? Do you have a large or small family? How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family? Do you get along well with your family? Are people i v. 1
There is no doubt that engaging in physical exercise has long-term beneficial consequences in people’s overall well-being. However, I partially agree with this statement, as I believe that the quality of diet has an equally important role in maintaining us healthy. On one hand, physical activity is crucial for burning fat cells, which are known to cause a variety of health problems, such as high blood sugar levels or cholesterol. People who exercise regularly are less prone to develop these conditions as they burn out the excess sugars and fats performing these activities. Perhaps the best examples for this are sportsmen who are rarely seen struggling with health problems as they are constantly physically active. On the other hand, the food we use to fuel our bodies to give us the energy for normal functioning plays an important role in keeping us healthy. For that matter, people who take care of their daily vitamin and protein intake through their diet are less likely to get sick as their immune systems are stronger than those people who consume large quantities of processed food. Other than that, a protein and vitamin rich diet is the fuel our body uses for functioning and if it does not have enough quantities of this fuel, our immune system will be the first to feel the effects of it. To conclude, maintaining a healthy body is impossible without physical activity, but the food we eat is what gives us the energy to engage in these activities and is, therefore, an equally important part of our health. In my opinion, if a person’s intake of candies and snacks is higher than their intake of meat and vegetables, they will not be able to perform exercises as they will not have enough energy for it and that will definitely have a detrimental effect on their health.
There is no doubt that engaging in physical exercise has long-term beneficial consequences in
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people’s
overall
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important
role in maintaining us healthy.

On one hand, physical
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activity
is crucial for burning
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fat
cells, which
are known
to cause a variety of
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health
problems, such as high blood sugar levels or cholesterol.
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People
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who
exercise
regularly
are less prone to develop these conditions as they burn out the excess sugars and fats performing these
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activities
. Perhaps the best examples for this are sportsmen
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who
are rarely
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seen
struggling with
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health
problems as they are
constantly
physically
active.

On the other hand
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fuel our bodies to give us the energy for normal functioning plays an
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important
role in keeping us healthy. For that matter,
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people
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who
take care of their daily vitamin and protein intake through their diet are less likely to
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get
sick as their immune systems are stronger than those
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people
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consume large quantities of processed food. Other than that, a protein and vitamin rich diet is the fuel our body
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uses
for functioning and if it does not have
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quantities of this fuel, our immune system will be the
first
to feel the effects of it.

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, maintaining a healthy body is impossible without physical
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activity
,
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but
the food we eat is what gives us the energy to engage in these
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activities
and is,
therefore
, an
equally
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important
part of our
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health
. In my opinion, if a person’s intake of candies and snacks is higher than their intake of meat and vegetables, they will not be able to perform exercises as they will not have
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enough
energy for it and that will definitely have a detrimental effect on their
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health
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay FAMILY Describe your family? Do you have a large or small family? How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family? Do you get along well with your family? Are people i v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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