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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion v.2

Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. 2
There has always been a contest of sorts between money and time. While most people argue that money can't buy you happiness, I strongly feel it is the most important resource to possess in the current scenario. Time is definitely a crucial element and a lot of things surround the same. Many would agree that it is important to have free time in order to do other things apart from work. This includes your hobbies, spend time with friends and family etc. There a number of people who spend most of their life trying to earn as much as they can but end up not finding an opportunity to use the funds they've making and saving. However, just having a lot of free time at hand is not what it sounds like. You could have a lot of people around you initially but your lack of cash will draw them away. As a matter of fact, most or all things that you intend to do in your free time is not possible if you can't fund them. For instance, your hobby which could be as simple as collecting stamps need some amount of spending. Money is an inevitable element in life. In fact, if you have money you could hire people to do mundane tasks and get time for yourself. It is not possible the other way round. To conclude, it is very clear that time is an important factor but it does not supercede money because one can buy other and not vice versa.
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. While most
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argue that
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resource to possess in the
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to have free
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in order to do other things apart from work. This includes your hobbies, spend
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time
with friends and family etc. There a number of
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who spend most of their life trying to earn as much as they can
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up not finding an opportunity to
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the funds they've making and saving.

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,
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having
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free
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at hand is not what it sounds like. You could have
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people
around you
initially
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your lack of cash will draw them away. As a matter of fact, most or all things that you intend to do in your free
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time
is not possible if you can't fund them.
For instance
, your hobby which could be as simple as collecting stamps need
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amount of spending.
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is an inevitable element in life. In fact, if you have
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money
you could hire
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people
to do mundane tasks and
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for yourself. It is not possible the other way round.

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, it is
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factor
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other and not vice versa.
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IELTS essay Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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