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Grandparents play a big role in bringing up the children. Do you think it is useful for grandparents? Discuss reasons with your opinion and give relevant examples. v.6

Grandparents play a big role in bringing up the children. Do you think it is useful for grandparents? Discuss reasons with your opinion and give relevant examples. v. 6
Children are unique and malleable upcoming generation. In young child' s life there is a major part of their grandparents in their upbringing. In my opinion, this is beneficial for the older people as well because they pass down their cultural values and take special care of their young ones. Firstly, elders always make sure to preach good moral values to their children. They find a sense of responsibility upon them to pass down the cultural values to next generation. Despite reluctance of their child, they make sure to imbibe the teachings which they have learnt from their ancestors. For instance, In a muslim family the knowledge of reading Arabic language is taught by the elders to their children from a very young age so that they can read the Holy Quran. This legacy passed on by the grandparents indeed bring them peace. Secondly, old people have a keen eyesight over their children. They always take special care of their younger children. They are not only the one' s who love them the most but also are the one' s to protect them from getting a beating from their parents. This extra attention brings energy for living and need to stay alive with their kid to see him grown up is always their desire. It is observed by many that elders always want to see their children succeed in their future, which brings them joy. Some are said to be awaiting to see their grandchildren' s wedding so that they live long enough. To sum up, In my view it is very much important for the children to be preached by their grandparents which in turn benefits them for passing down their legacy and love.
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they pass down their cultural values and take special care of their young ones.

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, elders always
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make
sure to preach
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good
moral values to their
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children
. They find a sense of responsibility upon them to pass down the cultural values to
next
generation. Despite reluctance of their child, they
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make
sure to imbibe the teachings which they have
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learnt
from their ancestors.
For instance
, In a
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muslim
family the knowledge of reading Arabic language
is taught
by the elders to their
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children
from a
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very
young age
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so
that they can read the Holy Quran. This legacy passed on by the grandparents
indeed
bring them peace.

Secondly
,
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old
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people
have a keen eyesight over their
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children
. They always take special care of their younger
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children
. They are not
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them the most
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#039; s to protect them from getting a beating from their parents. This extra attention brings energy for living and need to stay alive with their kid to
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him grown up is always their desire. It
is observed
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many
that elders always want to
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their
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children
succeed in their future, which brings them joy.
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are said
to be awaiting to
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their
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#039; s wedding
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that they
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live
long
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enough
.

To sum up, In my view it is
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very
much
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important
for the
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children
to
be preached
by their grandparents which in turn benefits them for passing down their legacy and
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love
.
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IELTS essay Grandparents play a big role in bringing up the children. Do you think it is useful for grandparents? Discuss reasons with your opinion and give relevant examples. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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