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Grandparents play a big role in bringing up the children. Do you think it is useful for grandparents? Discuss reasons with your opinion and give relevant examples. v.5

Some people opine that the involvement of grandparents and other members of the immediately family are beneficial for the all round development of children. I totally agree with this view. When children are raised or brought up in a joint family, it helps them to stay connected to their roots. This is because children are imparted the knowledge regarding their roots and family tree by grandparents. This is usually done by narrating the folklores related to their family history. Hence juveniles would be more aware of their culture when they stay with grandparents. Moreover, including all family members in nurturing children reduces the responsibility of parents. As the cost of living has increased, both parents now work to provide a better life to their children and as such they cannot spend enough time with their little ones or participate in their activities. However, if other family members are taking care of the child, life becomes less stressful for the parents and the child. Furthermore, it helps in keeping a watchful eye on each and every activity of children. During their growing up years children are more likely to indulge in bad activities if they are not kept under supervision. The involvement of the whole family in the upbringing of children makes them less vulnerable to bad influences. In conclusion, raising children in joint families provides them more security, and gives a good direction to their life; hence this should be encouraged more.
Some
people
opine that the involvement of grandparents and other members of the immediately
family
are beneficial for the all round development of
children
. I
totally
agree
with this view.

When
children
are raised
or brought up in a joint
family
, it
helps
them to stay connected to their roots. This is
because
children
are imparted
the knowledge regarding their roots and
family
tree by grandparents. This is
usually
done by narrating the
folklores
related to their
family
history.
Hence
juveniles would be more aware of their culture when they stay with grandparents.

Moreover
, including all
family
members in nurturing
children
reduces
the responsibility of parents. As the cost of living has increased, both parents
now
work to provide a better life to their
children
and as such they cannot spend
enough
time with their
little
ones or participate in their activities.
However
, if other
family
members are taking care of the child, life becomes less stressful for the parents and the child.

Furthermore
, it
helps
in keeping a watchful eye on each and every activity of
children
. During their growing up years
children
are more likely to indulge in
bad
activities if they are not
kept
under supervision. The involvement of the whole
family
in the upbringing of
children
makes
them less vulnerable to
bad
influences.

In conclusion
, raising
children
in joint
families
provides them more security, and gives a
good
direction to their life;
hence
this should
be encouraged
more.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it would be better if the whole family (uncles, aunts and grandparents) are involved in bringing up their children rather than only parents. What is your opinion?

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