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Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. with this statement? v. 1
It is true that environmental issues are one of the biggest concerns for many developed as well as developing countries. In fact, I agree that governments and large companies should take initiatives to mitigate environmental damages instead of individual effort for two main reasons. Firstly, organisations have the greater facilities to recover from the environmental issue. Although it is important to change the mindset of each individual, governments have the fund and workforce to reduce the waste problem in the community. For example, it is important to create social awareness in society so that people can understand the necessity of cleanliness of the their surroundings. To do this, big companies can collaboratively arrange various events with governments by using their allocated funds and also they can deploy their own workforce who are well-trained to teach local people about how to re-use products rather than throwing it into the bins. This way they not only create an impact in the society but also people will be more concerned about their environment. Moreover, governments along with large companies have the ability to make rules and impose those among the people. People nowadays generate a considerable amount of wastage in an unregulated way in their daily life. If governments impose stricter rules on disposing materials, then people bound to obey those rules otherwise they might be fined. In addition, multinational companies also can create their own packaging rules by which their team bound to develop a system that is less harmful to the environment. At least by following these rules, as a citizen or employee people will be more devoted to consuming less disposal. In Conclusion, not only do organisations have the money and workforce but also they can force people to obey the rules so that people have a good habit of waste maintenance. Therefore, I completely agree that it is the governments or largest companies who can reverse the environmental challenge currently facing througout the world.
It is true that
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environmental
issues are one of the biggest concerns for
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many
developed
as well
as
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developing countries
. In fact, I
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agree
that
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governments
and large
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companies
should take initiatives to mitigate
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environmental
damages
instead
of individual effort for two main reasons.

Firstly
,
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organisations
have the greater facilities to recover from the
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environmental
issue. Although it is
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important
to
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change
the mindset of each individual,
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governments
have the fund and workforce to
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reduce
the waste problem in the community.
For example
, it is
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important
to create social awareness in society
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so
that
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people
can understand the necessity of cleanliness of
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the their surroundings
. To do this,
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big
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companies
can
collaboratively
arrange various
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events
with
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governments
by using their allocated funds and
also
they can deploy their
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own
workforce who are well-trained to teach local
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people
about how to re-
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use
products
rather
than throwing it into the bins. This way they not
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only
create an impact in the society
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but
also
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people
will be more concerned about their environment.

Moreover
,
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governments
along with large
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companies
have the ability to
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make
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rules
and impose those among the
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people
.
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People
nowadays generate a considerable amount of wastage
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in an unregulated way
in their daily life. If
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governments
impose stricter
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rules
on disposing materials, then
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people
bound to obey those
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rules
otherwise
they might
be fined
.
In addition
, multinational
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companies
also
can create their
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own
packaging
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rules
by which their team bound to develop a system
that is
less harmful to the environment. At least by following these
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rules
, as a citizen or employee
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people
will be more devoted to consuming less disposal.

In Conclusion
, not
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only
do
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organisations
have the money and workforce
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but
also
they can force
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people
to obey the
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rules
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so
that
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people
have a
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good
habit of waste maintenance.
Therefore
, I completely
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agree
that it is the
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governments
or largest
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companies
who can reverse the
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environmental
challenge
currently
facing
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througout
the world.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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