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Government should spend more on science and research rather than economic or arts sectors. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Government should spend more on science and research rather than economic or arts sectors. v. 1
Nowadays people prefer to use products, having short life and throw them after a single use. This essay will discuss why they like that; easily available everywhere and economic. However, these products can create some problems, including generate lots of rubbish and to recycle this spoil the atmosphere. To begin with, people started to use products which are disposable as having some benefits. One of the important reasons is that these products were, available to any part of the world. This will help the person to buy certain glossary from any part if they travel to a different country; products, where available, so they avoid to carrying that. For example, during travelling everyone needs water, nowadays this comes in the small disposable bottle. They can buy it whenever the need arises. Moreover, if we talk about the prices of, such items then it is less compared to the previous item, that’s why the people prefer to use as it is economical. On the other hand, this single use and throw items trend is affecting a person’s life and society in many ways. Firstly, many people are using this, and they throw it after the use; these ways it generates more rubbish in the city. This would generate disease, such as viral fever, dengue. For instance, many countries are dealing with the waste problems as these will cause to many health issues. Furthermore, when this waste is collected in one place it must be recycled, this process also spoils the atmosphere at certain instant. In conclusion, people are using use and throw items as these will be easily available and cheaper in price, but also generate waste and to recycle create the pollution in the atmosphere. The government can make the public awareness about this issue and try to solve it.
Nowadays
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people
prefer to
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use
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products
, having short life and
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throw
them after a single
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use
. This essay will discuss why they like that;
easily
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available
everywhere and economic.
However
, these
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products
can create
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some
problems, including
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generate
lots of rubbish and to recycle this spoil the atmosphere.

To
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begin
with,
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people
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started
to
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use
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products
which are disposable as having
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some
benefits. One of the
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important
reasons is that these
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products
were,
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available
to any part of the world. This will
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help
the person to
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buy
certain glossary from any part if they travel to a
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different
country;
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products
, where
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available
,
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so
they avoid to carrying that.
For example
, during travelling everyone needs
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water
, nowadays this
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comes
in the
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small
disposable bottle. They can
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buy
it whenever the need arises.
Moreover
, if we talk about the prices of, such
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items
then it is less compared to the previous
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item
, that’s why the
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people
prefer to
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use
as it is economical.

On the other hand
, this single
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use
and
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throw
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items
trend is affecting a person’s life and society in
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many
ways.
Firstly
,
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many
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people
are using this, and they
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throw
it after the
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use
; these ways it
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generates
more rubbish in the city. This would
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generate
disease, such as viral fever, dengue.
For instance
,
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many
countries are dealing with the waste problems as these will cause to
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many
health issues.
Furthermore
, when this waste
is collected
in one place it
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must
be recycled
, this process
also
spoils the atmosphere at certain instant.

In conclusion
,
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people
are using
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use
and
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throw
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items
as these will be
easily
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available
and cheaper in price,
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but
also
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generate
waste and to recycle create the pollution in the atmosphere. The
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government
can
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make
the public awareness about this issue and try to solve it.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Government should spend more on science and research rather than economic or arts sectors. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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