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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.4

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 4
There are always some arguments that governments should consider the importance of railways funding instead of roads. I agree with the opinion given, because the rail system benefits both people and the environment. A good reason that why railway funding should be high in the government agenda rather than roads is that since the train is cheaper than a personal car, numerous people are not able to afford the cost of buying and reserving a personal vehicle. Therefore, it is more beneficial for many layers of society who transmit frequently from different parts of the city or town to another place. Such as, employees who have to commute daily by public transportation. Another reason that providing fund for railways is more important than roads is, firstly, from the perspective of air contamination, when the amount of cars slips in the roads and the streets, it brings nothing but exhausted fumes. So, the air pollution increase greatly and cause many serious problems for animals and humans, for instance, some scarce animal species extinct or many different types of cancers like skin cancer. In terms of environment, the more cars, the more roads. In the other word, the people who are warden of expandation of the roads have to eradicate more forests and jungles where many species inhabit there and also they plants and their fauna is essential for balancing different ecosystems. By providing funds subways and trains which carry a greater amount of people and goods, governments can reduce the amount of roads. In conclusion, railways system progression should be more fund in comparison with roads by governments and I strongly agree with this view because rail transportation is beneficial for both human survival and the environment.
There are always
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some
arguments that
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governments
should consider the importance of
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railways
funding
instead
of
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roads
. I
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agree
with the opinion
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given
,
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because
the rail system benefits both
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people
and the environment.

A
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good
reason that why
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railway
funding should be high in the
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government
agenda
rather
than
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roads
is that since the train is cheaper than a personal car, numerous
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people
are not able to afford the cost of buying and reserving a personal vehicle.
Therefore
, it is more beneficial for
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many
layers of society who transmit
frequently
from
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different
parts of the city or town to another place. Such as, employees who
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have to
commute daily by public transportation.

Another reason that providing fund for
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railways
is more
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important
than
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roads
is,
firstly
, from the perspective of air contamination, when the amount of cars slips in the
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roads
and the streets, it brings nothing
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but
exhausted fumes.
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So
, the air pollution increase
greatly
and cause
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many
serious problems for animals and humans,
for instance
,
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some
scarce animal species extinct or
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many
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different
types of cancers like skin cancer. In terms of environment, the more cars, the more
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roads
. In the other word, the
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people
who are warden of
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expandation
of the
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roads
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have to
eradicate more forests and jungles where
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many
species inhabit there and
also
they
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plants
and their fauna is essential for balancing
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different
ecosystems. By providing funds subways and trains which carry a greater amount of
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people
and
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goods
,
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governments
can
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reduce
the amount of roads.

In conclusion
,
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railways
system progression should be more fund
in comparison
with
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roads
by
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governments
and I
strongly
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agree
with this view
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because
rail transportation is beneficial for both human survival and the environment.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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