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Global warming is one of the biggest threat of our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v.1

Global warming is one of the biggest threat of our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v. 1
It is irrefutable that the global temperature has increased at an alarming rate in the last 50 years, which affect the climate and also increases the level of global warming, is the biggest threat to our environment. Firstly, this essay will not only critique the reasons behind this phenomenon, but also present some potential measures to tackle with this issue. It cannot be denied that the most common one reason is an industrial area. In many developing countries, there are numerous factors which make a distinct type of things and the amount of waste which come from these factories is enough dangerous either for environment or human's. The other cause is pollution. By this I mean, mills also emit harmful gases, which puts effect on the air. As well as nowadays, the majority of the people use private vehicles rather than public transport so, own automobiles will produce a lot of poisonous emission, which cause air pollution. Although the global warming issue is critical, this can be eradicated with some efforts of both government and local people. As government should initiate some rules and regulations to ensure the safety of the environment. Apart from this, government should collect the tax amount from both industrial section and whom who sale automobiles. Moreover, government should implement some new rule for those who throwing rubbish in the river and near to riverside then he or she will have to pay penalty. Local people should plant some trees for making the better environment which helps to refresh the air. The conclusion to be drawn is that government should heed proper attention to reduce these threats which have still detrimental effect on both climate and life of people. If government bodies and local people join their hand to mitigate this problem, then it will be fruitful for the safety of society and the environment.
It is irrefutable that the global temperature has increased at an alarming rate in the last 50 years, which affect the climate and
also
increases the level of global warming, is the biggest threat to our
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environment
.
Firstly
, this essay will not
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only
critique the reasons behind this phenomenon,
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but
also
present
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some
potential measures to tackle with this issue.

It cannot
be denied
that the most common one reason is an industrial area. In
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many
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developing countries
, there are numerous factors which
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make
a distinct type of things and the amount of waste which
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come
from these factories is
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enough
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dangerous
either for
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environment
or human's. The other cause is pollution. By this I mean, mills
also
emit harmful gases, which puts effect on the air.
As well
as nowadays, the majority of the
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
private vehicles
rather
than public transport
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so
,
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own
automobiles will produce
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a lot of
poisonous emission, which cause air pollution.

Although the global warming issue is critical, this can
be eradicated
with
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some
efforts of both
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government
and local
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people
. As
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government
should initiate
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some
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rules
and regulations to ensure the safety of the
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environment
. Apart from this,
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government
should collect the tax amount from both industrial section and whom who sale automobiles.
Moreover
,
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government
should implement
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some
new
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rule
for those who throwing rubbish in the river and near to riverside then he or she will
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have to
pay penalty. Local
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people
should plant
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some
trees for making the better
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environment
which
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helps
to refresh the air.

The conclusion to
be drawn
is that
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government
should heed proper attention to
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reduce
these threats which have
still
detrimental effect on both climate and life of
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people
. If
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government
bodies and local
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people
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join
their hand to mitigate this problem, then it will be fruitful for the safety of society and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Global warming is one of the biggest threat of our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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