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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v.1

Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v. 1
These days global warming is discussed widely in the mainstream media as one of the most concerning environmental issues that our earth has been facing for the last couple of decades. The causes of this issue include, but not limited to excessive consumption of fossil fuels and increasing deforestation around the world. However, the solution to this problem lies in alternate energy sources and preservation and restoration of forests. With the rise of industrialization, fossil fuel consumption has also increased significantly. This rise in fossil fuel demand accelerated the carbon footprint in the atmosphere all around the earth and triggered global temperatures to rise tremendously. Moreover, a large number of forests have been clear-cut across different parts of the globe to meet the demands of the latest lifestyles. These forests are considered as the earth’s lungs which not only absorb carbon dioxide and release oxygen into the atmosphere, but also maintain humidity levels in the air. But unfortunately, as these forests are chopped down, the earth is becoming warmer and vulnerable to the effects of global warming. According to a report published by the UN, dependence on fossil fuel and the rate of deforestation has tripled since 1950’s and it is anticipated that if no concrete measures are taken in time to control these trends, people will soon be compelled to buy oxygen to breathe. Despite the deteriorating situation, there is still hope that global warming can be tackled and its effects can be reversed by re-engineering people’s behaviours and practices around the world. However, fossil fuels cannot be replaced immediately, but a gradual shift to alternative energy sources can make a big difference. Many countries have started to move towards renewable energy sources such as hydro, solar and wind. Besides industries, according to a survey, a major part of fossil fuel is also burned by motor vehicles. Therefore, countries have also taken initiatives to reduce the number of vehicles by introducing mass transit systems in cities. Some governments encourage their people to buy electric-powered cars by offering them tax credits. In addition to reducing fossil fuel demand, preserving and restoring forests is another definite solution to overcome global warming. Saving existing trees and planting new ones will not only contribute to strengthening nature’s air filtration process but it will also help in reducing global temperatures to appropriate levels. Some countries are found in taking some significant initiatives in this regard. For example, recently, Ethiopia set a world record by planting 350 million trees to designated areas in the country within 12 hours. Environmentalists predict that this will surely reduce the effects of global warming which the country has been facing for decades. In conclusion, despite several factors, burning fossil fuels in huge quantities and cutting down forests are the major causes of global warming. However, reducing reliance on fuels for energy needs by switching to renewable energy sources, and preservation and reforestation are the solutions to this problem.
These days
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global
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warming
is discussed
widely
in the mainstream media as one of the most concerning environmental issues that our
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earth
has been facing for the last couple of decades. The causes of this issue include,
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but
not limited to excessive consumption of
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fossil
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fuels
and increasing deforestation around the world.
However
, the solution to this problem lies in alternate
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energy
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sources
and preservation and restoration of forests.

With the rise of industrialization,
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fossil
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fuel
consumption has
also
increased
significantly
. This rise in
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fossil
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fuel
demand accelerated the carbon footprint in the atmosphere all around the
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earth
and triggered
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global
temperatures to rise
tremendously
.
Moreover
,
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a large number of
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forests
have been
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cut
across
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different
parts of the globe to
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meet
the demands of the latest lifestyles. These
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forests
are considered
as the
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earth’s
lungs which not
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absorb carbon dioxide and release oxygen into the atmosphere,
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but
also
maintain humidity levels in the air.
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unfortunately, as these
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forests
are chopped
down, the
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earth
is becoming warmer and vulnerable to the effects of
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global
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warming
. According to a report published by the UN, dependence on
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fossil
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fuel
and the rate of deforestation has tripled since
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and it
is anticipated
that if no concrete measures
are taken
in time to control these trends,
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people
will
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soon
be compelled
to
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buy
oxygen to breathe.

Despite the deteriorating situation, there is
still
hope that
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global
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warming
can
be tackled
and its effects can
be reversed
by re-engineering
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people
’s
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behaviours
and practices around the world.
However
,
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fossil
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fuels
cannot
be replaced
immediately,
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but
a gradual shift to alternative
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energy
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sources
can
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make
a
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big
difference.
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countries
have
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to
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move
towards renewable
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energy
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sources
such as hydro, solar and wind.
Besides
industries, according to a survey, a major part of
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fossil
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fuel
is
also
burned by motor vehicles.
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,
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have
also
taken initiatives to
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reduce
the number of vehicles by introducing mass transit systems in cities.
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governments
encourage their
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people
to
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buy
electric-powered cars by offering them tax credits.
In addition
to reducing
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demand, preserving and restoring
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forests
is another
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solution to overcome
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global
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. Saving existing trees and planting new ones will not
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only
contribute to strengthening nature’s air filtration process
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but
it will
also
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help
in reducing
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global
temperatures to appropriate levels.
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Some
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countries
are found
in taking
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some
significant initiatives in this regard.
For example
, recently, Ethiopia set a world record by planting 350 million trees to designated areas in the
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country
within 12 hours. Environmentalists predict that this will
surely
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reduce
the effects of
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global
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warming
which the
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country
has been facing for decades.

In conclusion
, despite several factors, burning
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fossil
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fuels
in huge quantities and cutting down
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forests
are the major causes of
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global
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warming
.
However
, reducing reliance on
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fuels
for
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energy
needs by switching to renewable
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energy
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sources
, and preservation and reforestation are the solutions to this problem.
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54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
489 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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