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Global warming is the one of the biggest threat to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v.1

Global warming is the one of the biggest threat to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v. 1
For the past few years, due to global warming, we have seen sudden changes in the climate of the earth, which have become one of the most serious issue and an alarming situation for the world. This essay will analyse the major causes of global warming and discuss the measures that could be taken to solve the rising matter. In the beginning, The major cause of climate changes is one of the human activities such as deforestation and increased number of transportation. These things produce pollution resulting in having different gasses in the atmosphere causes the temperature to rise. The glaciers are melting day by day this is increasing sea level and triggers floods, heavy rainfalls and other extreme conditions of the weather. Moreover, Every country is now becoming advanced and having many industries and factories. They are also spreading pollution in the atmosphere, smoke in the air and dumping waste in the sea are the way others way if destroying the ozone layer and have consequences of global warming. Without a doubt, there are some solutions that the government and every individual should take in order to prevent and put to an end to this problem. Firstly, the government should organise campaigns and programs that would provide the awareness of recycling so that we could save our planet to some extent. In addition, stop deforestation plant more and more trees, make each of the country green and clean that would help in decreasing the ratio of harmful gases from the atmosphere. Furthermore, consumption of the fuel could be controlled by using public transports rather than using their own cars for transportation purpose. To conclude overall, global warming is very threatening problem that needs to be solved on the priority. This is the responsibility of mankind to reduce the acts that are affecting the planet. Recycling is the best way that they could be done by every individual to save the earth.
For the past few years, due to
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global
warming, we have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
sudden
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changes
in the climate of the earth, which have become one of the most serious issue and an alarming situation for the world. This essay will
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analyse
the major causes of
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global
warming and discuss the measures that could
be taken
to solve the rising matter.

In the beginning, The major cause of climate
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changes
is one of the human activities such as deforestation and increased number of transportation. These things produce pollution resulting in having
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different
gasses in the atmosphere causes the temperature to rise. The glaciers are melting day by day this is increasing sea level and triggers floods, heavy rainfalls and other extreme conditions of the weather.
Moreover
, Every country is
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now
becoming advanced and having
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many
industries and factories. They are
also
spreading pollution in the atmosphere, smoke in the air and dumping waste in the sea are the way others way if destroying the ozone layer and have consequences of
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global
warming.

Without a doubt, there are
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some
solutions that the
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government
and every individual should take in order to
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prevent
and put to an
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end
to this problem.
Firstly
, the
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government
should
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organise
campaigns and programs that would provide the awareness of recycling
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so
that we could save our planet to
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some
extent.
In addition
,
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stop
deforestation plant more and more trees,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
each of the country green and clean that would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in decreasing the ratio of harmful gases from the atmosphere.
Furthermore
, consumption of the fuel could
be controlled
by using public transports
rather
than using their
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own
cars for transportation purpose.

To conclude
overall
,
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global
warming is
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very
threatening problem that needs to
be solved
on the priority. This is the responsibility of mankind to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the acts that are affecting the planet. Recycling is the best way that they could
be done
by every individual to save the earth.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Global warming is the one of the biggest threat to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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