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Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees. Through genetic modification, it is possible to create trees that produce more fruits, grow faster, or withstand advers v.1

Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees. Through genetic modification, it is possible to create trees that produce more fruits, grow faster, or withstand advers v. 1
In the modern days, the family structure has changed. The young people have tended to live alone or in a small family, but others are preferred living in the nuclear families. Although I agree with this trend, I also argue that we still need animal products to some extent. On the one hand, living alone with a small family that parents are too busy to take care of their children have the similar positive. Initially, they can set their own rules and have the right to decide for themselves. They do not need to worry about waking up early in the morning or going to the bed early because there is no one watching or supervising. Besides, stay under the roof of a big family also has its own advantages. Children have better access the education when their parents are busy, they still have grandparents managing and teaching. They are also taught about many skills and lessons in life, which helps children think more mature. Moreover, staying in a family with three generations will increase the affection between family members so that they can understand each other more easily. On the other hand, there also have a huge of negative effect on staying alone and two generation family. To begin with, the people who living alone will be experienced feeling of loneliness and do not have a partner nearby to share everything in life such as the job, working environment. When they cause the heart disease, high blood pressure, even cardiovascular in case of emergency, there would be a dangerous case for alone people especially the elders. As well as, when the children receive less attention and guidance of their parents, they will engage in illegal activities like unlawful gambling. Also like that, the life in the large family also has its own disadvantages. Due to generations gap, members have conflicted in thinking about society, lifestyles, so really easy misunderstood each others. To conclude, living alone or in a big family has each benefit. In my opinion, I would choose to live in three generation family due to its benefits.
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people
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small
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family
,
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but
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. Although I
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agree
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argue that we
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some
extent.

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living
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alone
with a
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small
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family
that parents are too busy to take care of their
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children
have the similar
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positive
.
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, they can set their
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own
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rules
and have the right to decide for themselves. They do not need to worry about waking up early in the morning or going to the bed early
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because
there is no one watching or supervising.
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big
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family
also
has its
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own
advantages.
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have better access the education when their parents are busy, they
still
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also
taught about
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many
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skills
and lessons in life, which
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helps
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children
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think
more mature.
Moreover
, staying in a
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family
with three generations will increase the affection between
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family
members
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so
that they can understand each other more
easily
.

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also
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alone
and two generation
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. To
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begin
with, the
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people
who
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living
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alone
will
be experienced
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dangerous
case for
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alone
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people
especially
the elders.
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as, when the
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children
receive less attention and guidance of their parents, they will engage in illegal activities like unlawful gambling.
Also
like that, the life in the large
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family
also
has its
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own
disadvantages. Due to generations gap, members have conflicted in thinking about society, lifestyles,
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so
really
easy misunderstood each
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others
.

To conclude
,
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living
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alone
or in a
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big
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family
has each benefit. In my opinion, I would choose to
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live
in three generation
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family
due to its benefits.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Genetic modification, a process used to change an organism’s genes and hence its characteristics, is now being used to improve trees. Through genetic modification, it is possible to create trees that produce more fruits, grow faster, or withstand advers v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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