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An adaptation is a mutation, or genetic change, that helps an organism, such as a plant or animal survive in its environment. Due to the helpful nature of the mutation, it is passed down from one generation to the next. As more and more organisms inherit v.1

An adaptation is a mutation, or genetic change, that helps an organism, such as a plant or animal survive in its environment. Due to the helpful nature of the mutation, it is passed down from one generation to the next. As more and more organisms inherit v. 1
Most of the leaders are not born, but made. Leaders cannot come from birth. Some people argue that people are born leaders and others say that leadership can be learned. I strongly believe it is an assumption that people are born leaders and administrative qualities can be learned not as a process-oriented way but as an inspirational thought. The people who lead a group, company, or nation inherits the commanding and controlling qualities from the childhood. It can be observed from the child's communication with the children around. For example, In schools, a leader grabs the opportunity to monitor the class. They provide a helping attitude toward society. They even start analysing the issues and try to get the solutions for a good cause. In India, we have many national leaders like Mahatma Gandhi. Hence, people assume leaders are born and do not know the facts they have faced many failures. On the other hand, leadership qualities can be learned only by the dedication, hard work, commitment, motivating groups with positive attitudes, confidence. One should possess determination, experience, intelligence, and practice skills to overcome the right challenges. For example, a person inspired by a political chief tries to lead the neighbourhood issues to the government and would be helpful to bring reforms in the nation. I have experience related to leadership. My fore grandfather was a freedom fighter and I am the follower and not born as a leader. Finally, I strongly conclude that a leader is not born and is made with the situations around with a never give up attitude.
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made.
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cannot
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come
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people
argue that
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people
are born
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leaders
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and others
say that leadership can
be learned
. I
strongly
believe it is an assumption that
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people
are born
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leaders
and administrative qualities can
be learned
not as a process-oriented way
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but
as an inspirational
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thought
.

The
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people
who lead a group,
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company
, or nation inherits the commanding and controlling qualities from the childhood. It can
be observed
from the child's communication with the children around.
For example
, In schools, a
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leader
grabs the opportunity to monitor the
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class
. They provide a helping attitude toward society. They even
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start
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analysing
the issues and try to
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get
the solutions for a
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good
cause. In India, we have
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many
national
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leaders
like Mahatma Gandhi.
Hence
,
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people
assume
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leaders
are born
and do not know the facts they have faced
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many
failures.

On the other hand
, leadership qualities can
be learned
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only
by the dedication,
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hard
work, commitment, motivating groups with
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positive
attitudes, confidence. One should possess determination, experience, intelligence, and practice
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to overcome the right challenges.
For example
, a person inspired by a political chief tries to lead the
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbourhood' is British English.
neighbourhood
issues to the
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government
and would be helpful to bring reforms in the nation. I have experience related to leadership. My fore grandfather was a freedom
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fighter and
I am the follower and not born as a leader.

Finally
, I
strongly
conclude that a
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leader
is not born and
is made
with the situations around with a never give up attitude.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay An adaptation is a mutation, or genetic change, that helps an organism, such as a plant or animal survive in its environment. Due to the helpful nature of the mutation, it is passed down from one generation to the next. As more and more organisms inherit v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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