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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.23

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 23
At present, international tourism has become a prime source of economic growth of some countries and is tremendously growing for attracting people the world over. Although tourist markets generate the haphazard situation between people, who are connected with various cultures, I, partially, disagree with this viewpoint. This is because it helps people to communicate and embrace other cultures. To begin with, it is quite evident that the massive investment in tourism sectors succours any nations to develop immediately, but this also creates stress among nations, debates on any trifling issues and leaves the sign of anger among the common people. For example, Long Louver, a famous You tuber, went to Japan, where he found Japanese tradition a little bit odd which was telecasted not only in the YouTube but also in different media channels. This attitude of the American arose tension and hatred from Japanese. Another example of rising chaos is that one of the Chinese came to a buffet party in a Thai restaurant where he misbehaved with a waiter for his disrespect to his guests. Since all these issues do not publish in the USA and China, this rising tension is beyond to the general public. In contrast, touring in other countries pacifies the human body and soul. Furthermore, it connects different kinds of people and their culture which, consequently, could help people to know various traditions. Sometimes, some guests love other cultures, so much that they embrace those cultures as their own culture. For instance, many Americans like Indian culture. A renowned musician, Nick Jonas, an American, who married an Indian film star, Priyanka Chopra. This happens only for the love of Indian culture and people. Thus, international tourism not only provides revenue to the nation, but it also makes a bond with the host country. In conclusion, it is a controversial issue as to whether international tourism rises different types of crisis between people of various cultures, or, whether the growing tourism industry provides opportunities to mix with the other parts of the world and to communicate with people of different background. In my opinion, the proliferation of tourism company creates both
At present, international
tourism
has become a prime source of economic growth of
some
countries and is
tremendously
growing for attracting
people
the world over. Although tourist markets generate the haphazard situation between
people
, who
are connected
with various
cultures
, I,
partially
, disagree with this viewpoint. This is
because
it
helps
people
to communicate and embrace
other
cultures.

To
begin
with, it is quite evident that the massive investment in
tourism
sectors
succours
any nations to develop immediately,
but
this
also
creates
stress
among nations, debates on any trifling issues and
leaves
the
sign
of anger among the common
people
.
For example
, Long Louver, a
famous
You tuber, went to Japan, where he found Japanese tradition a
little bit
odd which was
telecasted
not
only
in the YouTube
but
also
in
different
media channels. This attitude of the American arose tension and hatred from Japanese. Another example of rising chaos is that one of the Chinese came to a buffet party in a Thai restaurant where he misbehaved with a waiter for his disrespect to his guests. Since all these issues do not publish in the USA and China, this rising tension is beyond to the
general public
.

In contrast
, touring in
other
countries pacifies the human body and soul.
Furthermore
, it connects
different
kinds of
people
and their
culture
which,
consequently
, could
help
people
to know various traditions.
Sometimes
,
some
guests
love
other
cultures
,
so
much that they embrace those
cultures
as their
own
culture
.
For instance
,
many
Americans like Indian
culture
. A renowned musician, Nick Jonas, an American, who married an Indian film star, Priyanka Chopra. This happens
only
for the
love
of Indian
culture
and
people
.
Thus
, international
tourism
not
only
provides revenue to the nation,
but
it
also
makes
a bond with the host country.

In conclusion
, it is a controversial issue
as to whether
international
tourism
rises
different
types of crisis between
people
of various
cultures
, or, whether the growing
tourism
industry provides opportunities to mix with the
other
parts of the world and to communicate with
people
of
different
background. In my opinion, the proliferation of
tourism
company
creates
both
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IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion? v. 23

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