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Fossil fuels such as coal oil and natural gas are used in many countries The use of alternative sources of energy including wind and solar power is encouraged Is this trend is a positive or negative development v.1

Fossil fuels such as coal oil and natural gas are used in many countries The use of alternative sources of energy including wind and solar power is encouraged Is this trend is a positive or negative development v. 1
There are contrasting views of people that promoting healthy living to cure disease is better than treating the disease. Some opine that it is prominent to invest in motivating people to live a healthy lifestyle so that any health disease can be avoided than to use public money to treat the patients. While I totally agree to encourage healthy living, I believe that treatment facilities are important too. Health awareness is necessary among humans in order to secure our body from hazardous health issues. This can be achieved by investing in educating people about healthcare practices like hygiene, physical activities, fitness campaign, etc. This will result in increasing knowledge of individuals of how to take care of their health and prevent health related issues in the long term. Moreover, it will lessen the number of patients in society and reduce ill effects of spreading diseases. On the other treating the existing patients in hospitals is utmost important. This is because if the infected people are not diagnosed and look after they will die and spoil the environment. This will also result in spreading the diseases in the society which will then be again incurable and impossible to stop this vicious circle. Again, it will become essential to spend huge amounts to prevent human beings from hazardous effects if illness in the long period. To conclude prevention is better than cure. Therefore, in my opinion, it is always better to invest public money in health care and wellness programs and motivate people to live healthy and hygienic life, but not neglecting to mitigate the patients who are suffering from dangerous diseases like Cancer, AIDS etc.
There are contrasting views of
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people
that promoting
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healthy
living to cure
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disease
is better than treating the
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disease
.
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Some
opine that it is prominent to invest in motivating
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people
to
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live
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healthy
lifestyle
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so
that any
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health
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disease
can
be avoided
than to
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use
public money to treat the
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patients
. While I
totally
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agree
to encourage
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healthy
living, I believe that treatment facilities are
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important
too.

Health awareness is necessary among humans in order to secure our body from hazardous
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health
issues. This can
be achieved
by investing in educating
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people
about healthcare practices like hygiene, physical activities, fitness campaign, etc. This will result in increasing knowledge of individuals of how to take care of their
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health
and
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prevent
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health
related issues in the long term.
Moreover
, it will lessen the number of
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patients
in society and
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reduce
ill effects of spreading diseases.

On the other treating the existing
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patients
in hospitals is utmost
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important
. This is
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because
if the infected
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people
are not diagnosed and look after they will
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die
and spoil the environment. This will
also
result in spreading the
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diseases
in the society which will then be again incurable and impossible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
this vicious circle. Again, it will become essential to spend huge amounts to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
human beings from hazardous effects if illness in the long period.

To conclude
prevention is better than cure.
Therefore
, in my opinion, it is always better to invest public money in
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health
care and wellness programs and motivate
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
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healthy
and hygienic life,
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but
not neglecting to mitigate the
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patients
who are suffering from
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dangerous
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diseases
like Cancer, AIDS etc.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuels such as coal oil and natural gas are used in many countries The use of alternative sources of energy including wind and solar power is encouraged Is this trend is a positive or negative development v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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