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Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil, natural gas, are used in many countries. But in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, are encouraged. Is this trend a positive or a negative development? v.1

Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil, natural gas, are used in many countries. But in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, are encouraged. Is this trend a positive or a negative development? v. 1
It is irrefutable that fossil fuels are the main source of energy in many parts of the world, but renewable substitutes like solar power are getting popularised at an unprecedented rate in some nations. In my opinion, I fully convinced that developing the alternative sources of energy is positive mainly because of its renewable and environmental-friendly features. To begin with, It is widely acknowledged that renewable resources such as solar power and hydropower is an everlasting source of power and can thus be utilized repetitively. By contrast, non-renewable resource like fossil fuels can be only used once. Under this circumstance, people are likely to lack of such resources because of excessive consumption. Therefore, the local government should encourage people to adopt alternative sources of energy instead of fossil fuels. Furthermore, instead of producing poisonous gas into the air, alternative resources fully make use of natural resources to generate energy without pollution. For instance, France has solar panels which converse electricity from sunlight. It is clear that currently both countries reduce polluting the environment and releasing greenhouse gases during operation. Although the use of these alternative sources has some hurdles such as the initial cost of setting up solar panels and wind farms is very high, and these are also dependent on the geographical location. Nevertheless, once the initial cost has been met with, their maintenance is practically negligible. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the application of the potential energy sources to replace conventional energy is obviously an important step forward. Thus, in order to reduce pollution and establish a sustainable development model, governments should support and encourage the use of renewable energy sources and reduce the global dependence on fossil fuels.
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fuels
are the main
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source
of
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energy
in
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many
parts of the world,
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but
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renewable
substitutes like
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solar
power are getting
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popularised
at an unprecedented rate in
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some
nations. In my opinion, I
fully
convinced that developing the
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alternative
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sources
of
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energy
is
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positive
mainly
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because
of its
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renewable
and environmental-friendly features.

To
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begin
with, It is
widely
acknowledged that
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renewable
resources such as
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solar
power and hydropower is an everlasting
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source
of power and can
thus
be utilized
repetitively
. By contrast, non-renewable
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resource
like
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fossil
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fuels
can be
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only
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used
once. Under this circumstance,
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people
are likely to lack of such resources
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because
of excessive consumption.
Therefore
, the local
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government
should encourage
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people
to adopt
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alternative
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sources
of
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energy
instead
of
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fossil
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fuels
.
Furthermore
,
instead
of producing poisonous gas into the air,
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alternative
resources
fully
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make
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use
of natural resources to generate
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energy
without pollution.
For instance
, France has
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solar
panels which converse electricity from sunlight. It is
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clear
that
currently
both countries
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reduce
polluting the environment and releasing greenhouse gases during operation.

Although the
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use
of these
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alternative
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sources
has
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some
hurdles such as the initial cost of setting up
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solar
panels and wind farms is
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very
high, and these are
also
dependent on the geographical location.
Nevertheless
, once the initial cost has
been met
with, their maintenance is
practically
negligible.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that the application of the potential
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energy
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sources
to replace conventional
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energy
is
obviously
an
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important
step forward.
Thus
, in order to
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reduce
pollution and establish a sustainable development model,
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governments
should support and encourage the
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use
of
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renewable
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energy
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sources
and
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reduce
the global dependence on
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fossil
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fuels
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil, natural gas, are used in many countries. But in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, are encouraged. Is this trend a positive or a negative development? v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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