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Fossil fuels e g coals oil and gas are the main source of energy for most countries However alternative sources of energy e g wind and solar have been encouraged for use by some countries To what extent is this a positive or negative development v.1

Fossil fuels e g coals oil and gas are the main source of energy for most countries However alternative sources of energy e g wind and solar have been encouraged for use by some countries 1
Farmers moving to cities and choosing a city job over agriculture have become more prevalent in current scenario leading to a major issue in the future. In this essay, I will discuss its consequence and solution of this problem. Nowadays agricultural interest is reducing because of its low income and more effort to cultivate the land. Therefore, looking for a better job opportunity and high living they move to the urban area. However, this has led to increasing uncultivated land with decrease in food production as per demand. A Survey done in Maharashtra, has shown that there was a 15 percent decrease in agricultural production after the locals have stopped farming the land. Furthermore, cities are becoming overpopulated due to the surge of people arising mushrooming arrays of problems and difficulties. For instance, traffic congestion has increased by huge numbers in major cities around the world. On the other hand, this trend can be controlled with proper and adequate measures from the government collaborating with the local council. Firstly, the living standard should be upgraded in rural areas with provision if the basic infrastructures. Some social schemes and the facilities to attract individuals to carry on their profession. To illustrate in many countryside in USA education and health care system are made free of cost to motivate people and appreciate their hard work. Furthermore, the effective transportation and telecommunication will help farmers to effortlessly transfer their product in the market in better price. To sum up, the trend must be seized by improving standards in the villages. The government must play major role in order to stop the migration and maintain the state of equilibrium in the country
Farmers moving to
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cities
and choosing a city job over agriculture have become more prevalent in
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current
scenario leading to a major issue in the future. In this essay, I will discuss its consequence and solution of this problem.

Nowadays agricultural interest is reducing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its low income and more effort to cultivate the land.
Therefore
, looking for a better job opportunity and high living they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to the urban area.
However
, this has led to increasing uncultivated land with decrease in food production as per demand. A Survey done in Maharashtra, has shown that there was a 15 percent decrease in agricultural production after the locals have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
farming the land.
Furthermore
,
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cities
are becoming overpopulated due to the surge of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
arising mushrooming arrays of problems and difficulties.
For instance
, traffic congestion has increased by huge numbers in major
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
around the world.

On the other hand
, this trend can
be controlled
with proper and adequate measures from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
collaborating with the local council.
Firstly
, the living standard should
be upgraded
in rural areas with provision if the basic infrastructures.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
social schemes and the facilities to attract individuals to carry on their profession. To illustrate in
Possible agreement error. The noun countryside seems to be uncountable; consider using: "much countryside", "a good deal of countryside".
many countryside
in USA education and health care system
are made
free of cost to motivate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and appreciate their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work.
Furthermore
, the effective transportation and telecommunication will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
farmers to
effortlessly
transfer their product in the market in better price.

To sum up, the trend
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must
be seized
by improving standards in the villages. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
play major role in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the migration and maintain the state of equilibrium in the
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country
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels e g coals oil and gas are the main source of energy for most countries However alternative sources of energy e g wind and solar have been encouraged for use by some countries 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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