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Fossil fuels (e. g. coals, oil and gas) are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy (e. g. wind and solar) have been encouraged for use by some countries. To what extent is this a positive or negative development v.1

Fossil fuels (e. g. coals, oil and gas) are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy (e. g. wind and solar) have been encouraged for use by some countries. 1
In a democratic country, voting is not only a right of every citizen, but also his responsibility, however, not all people exercising this privilege has led the country into an impasse. In my essay, I would discuss the problems arising from lower voter turnout and the measures to amend the situation. Primarily, with the public not casting their vote, ineligible candidates could be elected to power. The government is formed after appraising the people’s choice through fair elections and not exercising their voting rights, would empower a biased administration. For instance, if the minorities in India don’t vote, it is possible that they will not be favoured in their policies. Similarly, with fewer people voting, they ensure the downfall of the nation. With an unfair regime voted to govern by the select few, the county would be faced with a collapse of equality and fair governance. However, these problems can be mitigated by appropriate remedial measures. Firstly, lack of awareness about voting has resulted in lower voter turnout. The public, especially youngsters needs to be educated about the positive influence of exerting the elective power vested in them, which in turn would shape the country for the future generations. Secondly, with advanced technology, it should be made possible for the old and physically challenged to be part of electing the suitable candidate for office. For example, online platform can be designed for the elderly to cast their vote from their homes. To conclude, it can be stated that it is the duty of every citizen to vote, the absence of which leads the nation into a catastrophe. Therefore, every citizen should exercise his right, imbibing the knowledge that one’s choice to vote would either make or break the future of the nation.
In a democratic country,
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voting
is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a right of every citizen,
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but
also
his responsibility,
however
, not all
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people
exercising this privilege has led the country into an impasse. In my essay, I would discuss the problems arising from lower voter turnout and the measures to amend the situation.

Primarily
, with the public not casting their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vote
, ineligible candidates could
be elected
to power. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is formed
after appraising the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s choice through
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
elections and not exercising their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
voting
rights, would empower a biased administration.
For instance
, if the minorities in India don’t
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vote
, it is possible that they will not be
Possible spelling mistake. 'favoured' is British English.
favoured
in their policies.
Similarly
, with fewer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
voting
, they ensure the downfall of the nation. With an unfair regime voted to govern by the select few, the county would
be faced
with a collapse of equality and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
governance.

However
, these problems can
be mitigated
by appropriate remedial measures.
Firstly
, lack of awareness about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
voting
has resulted in lower voter turnout. The public,
especially
youngsters needs to
be educated
about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
influence of exerting the elective power vested in them, which in turn would shape the country for the future generations.
Secondly
, with advanced technology, it should
be made
possible for the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
and
physically
challenged to be part of electing the suitable candidate for office.
For example
, online platform can
be designed
for the elderly to cast their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vote
from their homes.

To conclude
, it can
be stated
that it is the duty of every citizen to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vote
, the absence of which leads the nation into a catastrophe.
Therefore
, every citizen should exercise his right, imbibing the knowledge that one’s choice to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vote
would either
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
or break the future of the nation.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuels (e. g. coals, oil and gas) are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy (e. g. wind and solar) have been encouraged for use by some countries. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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