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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world However people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy solar energy and so on Do you think this is a positive or negative development v.2

Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world However people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy solar energy and so on Do you think this is a positive or negative development v. 2
The trend towards industries using fossil fuels is increasingly prevalent. However, it is encouraged to use alternative energy sources. In my opinion, I completely agree with this for two main reasons. First, renewable sources including wind and solar power are beneficial to the environment and second, they are more economical compared to their fossil counterparts. In terms of alternative energy sources, wind and solar power are environmentally friendly because they do not release any toxic gases into the atmosphere after exploiting them. The result of using these sources is to create electricity to power such vehicles as trams and electric cars, which are widely used in most parts of the world and do not release carbon dioxide. Unlike fossil fuels including coal, petroleum, and oil, they are of necessity to power petroleum-consumed transports. This, however, poses a problem to the environment such as global warming due to the excessive amount of toxic gases emitted into the air. Apart from the reason expressed above, I believe that the usage of renewable sources also benefits the economy of a country because they often cost less than that of fossil fuels. Wind and solar power are available and ubiquitous, which can easily be gained almost everywhere as long as proper equipment is installed. This equipment including a wind turbine or a solar panel can be found in most electric shops nowadays, enabling governments to invest and create electricity for their country. In contrast, fossil fuels take a lot of time and effort to exploit because coal and oil lay underground, and the exploitation of them has to depend on advanced drills and other expensive tools. In conclusion, it is true that the usage of fossil fuels has been evident for years. I, however, believe that renewable sources such as wind and solar power should be taken priority because not only are they eco-friendly but also do not cost a great deal of money.
The trend towards industries using
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fossil
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fuels
is
increasingly
prevalent.
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is encouraged
to
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use
alternative energy
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sources
. In my opinion, I completely
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agree
with this for two main reasons.
First
, renewable
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sources
including
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wind
and
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solar
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power
are beneficial to the environment and second, they are more economical compared to their
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fossil
counterparts.

In terms of alternative energy
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sources
,
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wind
and
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solar
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power
are
environmentally
friendly
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because
they do not release any toxic gases into the atmosphere after exploiting them. The result of using these
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sources
is to create electricity to
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power
such vehicles as trams and electric cars, which are
widely
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used
in most parts of the world and do not release carbon dioxide. Unlike
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fossil
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fuels
including coal, petroleum, and oil, they are of necessity to
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power
petroleum-consumed transports. This,
however
, poses a problem to the environment such as global warming due to the excessive amount of toxic gases emitted into the air.

Apart from the reason expressed above, I believe that the usage of renewable
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sources
also
benefits the economy of a country
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because
they
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often
cost less than that of
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fuels
.
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Wind
and
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solar
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power
are available and ubiquitous, which can
easily
be gained
almost everywhere as long as proper equipment
is installed
. This equipment including a
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wind
turbine or a
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solar
panel can
be found
in most electric shops nowadays, enabling
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governments
to invest and create electricity for their country.
In contrast
,
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fossil
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fuels
take
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a lot of
time and effort to exploit
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because
coal and oil lay underground, and the exploitation of them
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has to
depend on advanced drills and other expensive tools.

In conclusion
, it is true that the usage of
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fossil
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fuels
has been evident for years. I,
however
, believe that renewable
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sources
such as
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wind
and
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solar
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power
should
be taken
priority
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because
not
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only
are they eco-friendly
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but
also
do not cost a great deal of money.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world However people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy solar energy and so on Do you think this is a positive or negative development v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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