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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world However people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy solar energy and so on Do you think this is a positive or negative development v.1

Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world However people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy solar energy and so on Do you think this is a positive or negative development v. 1
It is irrefutable that all children enjoy playing with their toys. Hence, many parents buy a plethora of toys for their offspring. This essay will discuss the positives and the drawbacks for the child of possessing many toys. Looking at the advantages, most of the toys, these days, help in learning new things. Therefore, more toys would definitely mean that a child could learn a great number of things. For example, snake and ladder game can help a child not only lear cognitive things such as addition and subtraction, but will also help learn moral value such as that life is full of ups and downs and everyone has to cope with them. Subsequently, a large number of toys also help learn the value of sharing things with others and give less importance to materialistic belongings. On the flip side, the children who get a lot of toys, every now and then, value them less. They do not give importance to the person who had spent his hard earned money as well as the time to buy it for them. Additionally, if a minor owns a large number of toys, he would spend a lot of time playing with them, and as a result, would play instead of studying during the crucial hours of the day. For instance, it is highly likely that the children who possess more toys, spend more time playing and this has perilous effects on their studies. In conclusion, as each coin has two flip sides, by the same token, children possessing a large number of toys have both advantages and disadvantages that are stated above.
It is irrefutable that all
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children
enjoy playing with their
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toys
.
Hence
,
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many
parents
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buy
a plethora of
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toys
for their offspring. This essay will discuss the positives and the drawbacks for the child of possessing
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many
toys.

Looking at the advantages, most of the
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toys
, these days,
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help
in learning new things.
Therefore
, more
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toys
would definitely mean that a child could learn a great
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number
of things.
For example
, snake and ladder game can
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help
a child not
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only
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lear
cognitive things such as addition and subtraction,
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but
will
also
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help
learn moral value such as that life is full of ups and downs and everyone
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has to
cope with them.
Subsequently
, a large
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number
of
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toys
also
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help
learn the value of sharing things with others and give less importance to materialistic belongings.

On the flip side, the
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children
who
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get
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a lot of
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toys
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hard earned
money
as well
as the time to
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buy
it for them.
Additionally
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owns
a large
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number
of
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toys
, he would spend
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a lot of
time playing with them, and
as a result
, would play
instead
of studying during the crucial hours of the day.
For instance
, it is
highly
likely that the
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children
who possess more
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toys
, spend more time playing and this has perilous effects on their studies.

In conclusion
, as each coin has two flip sides, by the same token,
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children
possessing a large
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number
of
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toys
have both advantages and disadvantages that
are stated
above.
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world However people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy solar energy and so on Do you think this is a positive or negative development v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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