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Some people think that cars should be banned in big city centres. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that cars should be banned in big city centres. v. 1
Buildings make great landmarks and grab attention. In my opinion, they have to be functional and attractive. Both aspects are equally important and a building that satisfies only one of these criteria cannot be considered as a successful project. Beautiful buildings add character to a city. Aesthetically designed buildings, even have a commercial value. Take, for instance, the case of forts, palaces and castles. They attract visitors even today. People talk about their architectural brilliance; they talk highly of the architects who conceived these buildings. No-one will want to visit these buildings today if they don’t look good. Well-designed buildings have enduring appeal. The most famous buildings in the world are as beautiful as they are functional. People still flock to see monuments such as Taj Mahal, Mysore Palace, Eiffel Tower and Buckingham Palace. They are not exactly concerned with the functional aspects of these buildings. What attracts them to these structures is their beauty. Taj Mahal, for example, is nothing more than a mausoleum, but that building attracts more people than any other building in India simply because it is one of the most beautiful buildings in their world. Buildings are much more than a place to work, rest or sleep. They serve several other purposes as well. It is possible to build beautiful buildings that also serve their purposes well. Of course, this might increase the cost of construction, but in the long term the benefits will outweigh the initial cost. To conclude, buildings last decades or even centuries. Since they are permanent structures that will adorn our skyline for a long time, it makes sense to pay attention to their aesthetic aspects as well. Lots of natural resources are required to construct a building. The frenetic pace with which buildings are being constructed has already caused the depletion of natural resources. Therefore, people should be discouraged from building excessively large buildings or spending a lot of money on beatifying buildings.
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Buildings
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make
great landmarks and grab attention. In my opinion, they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be functional and attractive. Both aspects are
equally
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important
and a
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building
that satisfies
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only
one of these criteria cannot
be considered
as a successful project.

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Beautiful
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buildings
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
character to a city.
Aesthetically
designed
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buildings
, even have a commercial value. Take,
for instance
, the case of forts, palaces and castles. They attract visitors even
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today
.
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People
talk about their architectural brilliance; they talk
highly
of the architects who conceived these
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buildings
. No-one will want to visit these
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buildings
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today
if they don’t look
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good
.

Well-designed
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buildings
have enduring appeal. The most
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famous
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buildings
in the world are as
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beautiful
as they are functional.
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People
still
flock to
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see
monuments such as Taj Mahal, Mysore Palace, Eiffel Tower and Buckingham Palace. They are not exactly concerned with the functional aspects of these
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buildings
. What attracts them to these structures is their beauty. Taj Mahal,
for example
, is nothing more than a mausoleum,
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but
that
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building
attracts more
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people
than any other
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building
in India
simply
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because
it is one of the most
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beautiful
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buildings
in their world.

Buildings are much more than a place to work, rest or sleep. They serve several other purposes
as well
. It is possible to build
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beautiful
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buildings
that
also
serve their purposes well.
Of course
, this might increase the cost of construction,
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but
in the long term the benefits will outweigh the initial cost.

To conclude
,
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buildings
last decades or even centuries. Since they are permanent structures that will adorn our skyline for a long time, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
sense to pay attention to their aesthetic aspects
as well
. Lots of natural resources
are required
to construct a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
. The frenetic pace with which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
are
being constructed
has already caused the depletion of natural resources.
Therefore
,
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people
should
be discouraged
from
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building
excessively
large
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buildings
or spending
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a lot of
money on beatifying
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buildings
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that cars should be banned in big city centres. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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