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Fossil fuels are teh main source of energy for most of countries. However alternative sources of energy have been encouraged for use by some countries. To what extent is this a positive or nagative development? v.1

Fossil fuels are teh main source of energy for most of countries. However alternative sources of energy have been encouraged for use by some countries. v. 1
Currently, many nations encourage its citizens to use renewable energy sources than non-renewable sources since the former has less damaging effect on the atmosphere the later one. In my opinion, I consider it is a positive trend and it brings more advantages than any disadvantages it might cause. One obvious point here is that renewable source of energy has minimum pollutants. In other words, from fossil fuels emit a huge amount of carbon dioxide, which contaminates not only air, but water bodies as well. This, eventually, causes many breakages of Oxon layer and worsen global warming. Due to these consequences negatively impacts the entire planet earth in a great extent. However, whereas using the wind energy does not create any waste products such as carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide, both are deadly poisons to flora fauna. Another factor is taken into account is that, alternative fuels can be produced in abundance as these are widely available in the world. Normally, in order to acquire these energy; solar power, wind power, and, tidal energy, using less expensive technologies compared to the fossil one. Despite this, some experts point out that, these green sources may produce some problems in terms of technical aspects. Producing these for a commercial purposes require more research and scientific analysis. Additionally, the society need to be educated the significance of this energy and motivate more people to prefer electronic cars and using solar panels in their houses would reduce the consumption of fossil fuels. Therefore, it is clear that while there may be some difficulties when introducing a new form of energy, this can be negligible as this bring more benefits to the world. By way of conclusion, even though fossil fuels are using every walk of life, green fuel would be far better as this can be widely available and causing less pollution.
Currently
,
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many
nations encourage its citizens to
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use
renewable
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energy
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sources
than non-renewable
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sources
since the former has less damaging effect on the atmosphere the later one. In my opinion, I consider it is a
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positive
trend and it brings more advantages than any disadvantages it might cause.

One obvious point here is that renewable
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source
of
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energy
has minimum pollutants.
In other words
, from
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fossil
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fuels
emit a huge amount of carbon dioxide, which contaminates not
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only
air,
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but
water bodies
as well
. This,
eventually
, causes
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many
breakages of
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Oxon
layer and worsen global warming. Due to these consequences
negatively
impacts the entire planet earth in a great extent.
However
, whereas using the wind
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energy
does not create any waste products such as carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide, both are deadly poisons to flora fauna.

Another factor
is taken
into account is that, alternative
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fuels
can
be produced
in abundance as these are
widely
available in the world.
Normally
, in order to acquire these
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energy
; solar power, wind power, and, tidal
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energy
, using less expensive technologies compared to the
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fossil
one. Despite this,
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some
experts point out that, these green
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sources
may produce
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some
problems in terms of technical aspects. Producing these for a commercial purposes require more research and scientific analysis.
Additionally
, the society need to
be educated
the significance of this
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energy
and motivate more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to prefer electronic cars and using solar panels in their
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houses
would
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reduce
the consumption of
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fossil
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fuels
.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
that while there may be
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some
difficulties when introducing a new form of
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energy
, this can be negligible as
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this bring
more benefits to the world.

By way of conclusion,
even though
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fossil
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fuels
are using every walk of life, green
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fuel
would be far better as this can be
widely
available and causing less pollution.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuels are teh main source of energy for most of countries. However alternative sources of energy have been encouraged for use by some countries. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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