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Many countries use fossil fuels( coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy( wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this development. v.1

Many countries use fossil fuels( coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy( wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. with this development. v. 1
Nowadays, fuel energy is the overriding concern of governments around the world. Many countries consume mainly natural fuels, while others use alternative sources of energy. In my opinion, I absolutely agree with the second idea. On the one hand, consuming many fossil fuels has undoubtedly taken a heavy toll on Earth’s environment for many reasons. Firstly, excessive exploitation of natural resources could pose a threat to the lives of fauna and flora on our planet because the mining and quarrying make soil become acidic and poor nutrition. Secondly, in modern society almost people consume coal as the main fuel for cars. This means more and more carbon dioxide would be emitted into the atmosphere, which is responsible for the main reason for global warming and ice melting. Thirdly, natural resources are not infinite, if over-exploited will lead to the rapid exhaustion of the earth’s natural resources. For example, Viet Nam once was a rich natural country in the world, however, due to over exploitation and uncontrolled deforestation, resources are becoming to run out. Despite the aforementioned drawbacks above, I am convinced that using substitute resources are much better. By using green energy, people can save raw material and protect our environment. Furthermore, eternal power such as wind energy and solar energy can provide infinite a large of energy for users. Besides, many governments in developing countries such as the USA and Germany, launch a campaign to raise residents’ awareness about environmental issues and incentivize the public to use greener fuels. In conclusion, I believe that the use of other potential power to replace fossil fuels is obviously an indispensable step forward
Nowadays,
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fuel
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energy
is the overriding concern of
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governments
around the world.
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countries consume
mainly
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natural
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fuels
, while others
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use
alternative sources of
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energy
. In my opinion, I
absolutely
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agree
with the second
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idea
.

On the one hand, consuming
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many
fossil
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fuels
has
undoubtedly
taken a heavy toll on Earth’s environment for
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many
reasons.
Firstly
, excessive exploitation of
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natural
resources could pose a threat to the
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lives
of fauna and flora on our planet
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because
the mining and quarrying
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make
soil become acidic and poor nutrition.
Secondly
, in modern society almost
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people
consume coal as the main
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fuel
for cars. This means more and more carbon dioxide would
be emitted
into the atmosphere, which is responsible for the main reason for global warming and ice melting.
Thirdly
,
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natural
resources are not infinite, if over-exploited will lead to the rapid exhaustion of the earth’s
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natural
resources.
For example
,
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Viet
Nam once was a rich
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natural
country in the world,
however
, due to over exploitation and uncontrolled deforestation, resources are becoming to run out.

Despite the aforementioned drawbacks above, I
am convinced
that using substitute resources are much better. By using green
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energy
,
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people
can save raw material and protect our environment.

Furthermore
, eternal power such as wind
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energy
and solar
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energy
can provide infinite a large of
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energy
for users.
Besides
,
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many
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governments
in
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developing countries
such as the USA and Germany, launch a campaign to raise residents’ awareness about environmental issues and incentivize the public to
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use
greener fuels.

In conclusion
, I believe that the
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use
of other potential power to replace fossil
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fuels
is
obviously
an indispensable step forward
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many countries use fossil fuels( coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy( wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. with this development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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