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fossil fuel are the main source of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Why? v.2

fossil fuel are the main source of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Why? v. 2
fossil fuel is the main element of generating energy in the world. In this modern era, populations have been progressing steadily across the globe. due to that, pollution has raised the margin level. Apart from that, fossil fuel has been involved in environmental problems. To begin with, fossil fuel has become the conceptualized industrialization area, where the surrounding areas were inculcated to stop the environmental crisis. Owing to that, many nations are discouraging fossil fuel instead of using other alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy, and additional sources. Hence, this potential factor of using alternative sources are a beneficial outcome to save environmental problems. Certain numbers of nations are implementing alternative energy to save plants and animal life. I believed that wind and solar energy are an optimistic impact to prevent air pollution and respiratory diseases or asthma. On the other hand, alternative energy sources are highly demanded and some bordering countries could not able to consume energy sources. due to that, energy consumption cost has immense in consuming from supply and demand forces of renewable energy. As a result, the rise in energy consumption has likely increased the growth and also the economic impact of the countries. In contrast, the huge process of burning fossil fuel as created carbon dioxide. Consequently, it finally contributes to global warming. However, it would lead to climate change. In my point of view, fossil fuel has become the determination to avoid saving in pollution. solar and wind energy produce electricity and which could help to improve the economy. In a nutshell, global warming has caused by various aspects of fossil fuel energy. I believe that, in this foreseeable future, alternative sources will be much beneficial to save the lives and fewer pollutant areas. I think it would be a positive development from green energy generates renewable sources like solar and wind energy.
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fossil
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fuel
is the main element of generating
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energy
in the world. In this modern era, populations have been progressing
steadily
across the globe.
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due
to that, pollution has raised the margin level. Apart from that,
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fossil
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fuel
has
been involved
in environmental problems.

To
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begin
with,
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fossil
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fuel
has become the conceptualized industrialization area, where the surrounding areas
were inculcated
to
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stop
the environmental crisis. Owing to that,
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many
nations are discouraging
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fossil
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fuel
instead
of using other
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alternative
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energy
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sources
such as
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wind
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energy
,
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solar
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energy
, and additional
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sources
.
Hence
, this potential factor of using
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alternative
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sources
are a beneficial outcome to save environmental problems. Certain numbers of nations are implementing
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alternative
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energy
to save plants and animal life. I believed that
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wind
and
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solar
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energy
are an optimistic impact to
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prevent
air pollution and respiratory diseases or asthma.

On the other hand
,
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alternative
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energy
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sources
are
highly
demanded and
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some
bordering countries could not able to consume
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energy
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sources
.
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due
to that,
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energy
consumption cost has immense in consuming from supply and demand forces of renewable
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energy
.
As a result
, the rise in
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energy
consumption has likely increased the growth and
also
the economic impact of the countries.
In contrast
, the huge process of burning
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fossil
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fuel
as created carbon dioxide.
Consequently
, it
finally
contributes to global warming.
However
, it would lead to climate
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change
. In my point of view,
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fossil
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fuel
has become the determination to avoid saving in pollution.
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solar
and
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wind
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energy
produce electricity and which could
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help
to
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improve
the economy.

In a nutshell, global warming has caused by various aspects of
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fossil
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fuel
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energy
. I believe that, in this foreseeable future,
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alternative
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sources
will be much beneficial to save the
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lives
and fewer pollutant areas. I
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think
it would be a
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positive
development from green
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energy
generates renewable
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sources
like
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solar
and
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wind
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energy
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay fossil fuel are the main source of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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