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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own experience or knowledge.

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 4
n many cases, numerous people still confuse to choose their accommodation. Some of them think that residing in a house is the pros owing to privacy and investment factors. In contrast, others believe that a permanent establishment is too expensive to own, and apartments are the perfect solution to their accommodation necessities. From my point of view, both have their pros and cons, but an apartment offers more significant benefits than an apartment. First and foremost, living in a permanent settlement like a house is for people who want to live with partners for a long time due to the size that is way bigger than an apartment. Moreover, there are other benefits of living in a house such as privacy and investment for an extended time. However, it is clear that living in a home has so many disadvantages, such as extremely overpriced cost, difficulty to maintenance, and so much more. Someone who already has a family could be a great example to buy a residence. Therefore, both the parents can keep their money to purchase the house, and their kids can help them to keep the house clean and safe. On the other hand, living in a flat give benefits to someone who didn’t have a family. The main reason behind this is the convenience they offer, such as the facility, safety, and maintenance. To illustrate, people did not have to stress about clothes to wash, or a thief might get into their room, or maybe about the water and air circulation. Besides, the cheaper utility, flexibility to move, less expensive cost and location that more close to the city can be other pros. Despite this fact, living in an apartment also have disadvantages to consider. A condominium is not a good investment for the long term also service charge that we have to pay every year can be a problem. For that reason, living in an apartment is perfect for someone who did not want to stay for a long time and want flexibility such as college student and young workers. In conclusion, apartments and houses have their pros and cons, and it depends on the condition, situation, and personal preferences. However, I believe that apartments satisfy the needs of our modern lifestyle better than independent houses.
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confuse to choose their accommodation.
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of them
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that residing in a
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is the
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pros
owing to privacy and investment factors.
In contrast
, others believe that a permanent establishment is too expensive to
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own
, and
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apartments
are the perfect solution to their accommodation necessities. From my point of view, both have their
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pros
and cons,
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but
an
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apartment
offers more significant benefits than an apartment.

First
and foremost,
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living
in a permanent settlement like a
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house
is for
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people
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who
want to
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live
with partners for a long time due to the size
that is
way bigger than an
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apartment
.
Moreover
, there are
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other
benefits of
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living
in a
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house
such as privacy and investment for an extended time.
However
, it is
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clear
that
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living
in a home has
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so
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many
disadvantages, such as
extremely
overpriced cost, difficulty to maintenance, and
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much more. Someone
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who
already has a family could be a great example to
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buy
a residence.
Therefore
, both the parents can
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keep
their money to
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purchase
the
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house
, and their kids can
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help
them to
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keep
the
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house
clean and safe.

On the
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other
hand,
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living
in a flat give benefits to someone
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who
didn’t have a family. The main reason behind this is the convenience they offer, such as the facility, safety, and maintenance. To illustrate,
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people
did not
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have to
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stress
about clothes to wash, or a thief might
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get
into their room, or maybe about the water and air circulation.
Besides
, the cheaper utility, flexibility to
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move
, less expensive cost and location that more close to the city can be
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other
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pros
. Despite this fact,
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living
in an
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apartment
also
have disadvantages to consider. A condominium is not a
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good
investment for the long term
also
service charge that we
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have to
pay every year can be a problem. For that reason,
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living
in an
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apartment
is perfect for someone
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who
did not want to stay for a long time and want flexibility such as college student and young workers.

In conclusion
,
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apartments
and
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houses
have their
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pros
and cons, and it depends on the condition, situation, and personal preferences.
However
, I believe that
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apartments
satisfy the needs of our modern lifestyle better than independent
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houses
.
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IELTS essay Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
380 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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