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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.3

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 3
Country monuments visit cost, it has a fluctuated price based on the nationality, is a heated-up subject and should be taken the highly consideration. It is believed that tourists should pay more than Original inhabitants for visiting the county`s monuments. I am supportive of the opinion that foreigners should pay more. This essay with discuss, firstly, the benefits of imposing more fees on the foreigners on the historical attractions and country economy. Secondly, why do locals should not bear more fees on seeing their own cultural places, followed by a reasoned conclusion. Historical attractions are existed since thousands of years, and these monuments need some sort of preservation and special care to keep it in a good condition to last long. Continues visiting by people at the historical places along with severe environment conditions may destroy the precious structure; therefore, money should be arranged to fund the preservation process. For example, government impose different price to the foreign visitors to secure the required budget required for any maintenance or repairs for such important heritage. People, who live in the country, are benefited from the low prices introduced by government on such visits, but there is a justified reason behind the low price applied for the these who are visiting the historical places. For instance, residents are exposed to pay several taxes which are applied by the government such on the wages, roads, facilities and so on. Hence, it is unfair to treat them like foreigners and force them pay same price. To sum up, applying high ticket`s price of the historical places for tourists is valid, but it should be controlled and monitored to seduce many people from all over the world. This is will reflect to boost the economy and country development.
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Country
monuments visit cost, it has a fluctuated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
based on the nationality, is a heated-up subject and should
be taken
the
highly
consideration. It
is believed
that tourists should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
more than Original inhabitants for visiting the
The character between 'county' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "county’s" (curly apostrophe) or "county's" (straight apostrophe).
county`s
monuments. I am supportive of the opinion that foreigners should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
more. This essay with discuss,
firstly
, the benefits of imposing more fees on the foreigners on the
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historical
attractions and
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country
economy.
Secondly
, why do locals should not bear more fees on seeing their
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own
cultural
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places
, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

Historical attractions
are existed
since thousands of years, and these monuments need
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some
sort of preservation and special care to
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keep
it in a
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good
condition to last long. Continues visiting by
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people
at the
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historical
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places
along with severe environment conditions may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroy
the precious structure;
therefore
, money should
be arranged
to fund the preservation process.
For example
,
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government
impose
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different
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price
to the foreign visitors to secure the required budget required for any maintenance or repairs for such
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important
heritage.

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People
, who
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live
in the
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country
,
are benefited
from the low
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prices
introduced by
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government
on such visits,
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but
there is a justified reason behind the low
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price
applied for the these who are visiting the
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historical
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places
.
For instance
, residents
are exposed
to
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pay
several taxes which
are applied
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
such on the wages, roads, facilities and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
Hence
, it is unfair to treat them like foreigners and force them
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pay
same price.

To sum up, applying high
The character between 'ticket' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "ticket’s" (curly apostrophe) or "ticket's" (straight apostrophe).
ticket`s
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price
of the
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historical
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places
for tourists is valid,
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but
it should
be controlled
and monitored to seduce
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many
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people
from all over the world. This is will reflect to boost the economy and
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country
development.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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