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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.14

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion. v. 14
It is undeniable that tourism has become a booming industry these days. However, some people contend that foreign tourists should be charged more as compared to the people of a host country during their visit to the worthseeing places of the country. This essay will argue why charging high prices for the people of other countries is a slightly preposterous despite some other potential reasons. To begin with, many people tend to choose abroad countries for travelling and the idea to pay higher amount of money than other visitors is an unacceptable to some extent. The reason why prices should be same for all is that if the host country will get more money from foreigners, then there will be a drastic decrease in the number of visitors because no one will consider this positively and feel themselves being robbed by the people of that particular area. Indeed, there have been some recorded instances of people who travel frequently to other destinations of their interest always feel connected with that particular place when they are treated equally and they keep the desire to travel to that place more than once. These few instances make it clear why native nation should be respectful towards the residents of the other place in terms of the chargeable cost of hotels, restaurants and other activities of their interest. Despite this, some tourist excursions are available only in a limited time of the year and for the dwellers of that particular place, tourism might be a seasonal occupation and in order to boost their economy in a restricted time period it is a quite reasonable to get lucrative from the foreigners. Because people have to rely on their seasonal income for the rest of the year that is why it is insisted to charge a little bit more from the cross country nations. Moreover, certainly for the infrastructure of the renowned visiting places large sum of money is required and eventually it would be only possible if the prices of the activities are higher. For example, Manali is a popular hill station of India where one could see immense visitors only in summer season and the people of that place get massive avail from the visiting folks. Overall, the idea to be paid more money by another nationality dwellers could potentially lead towards the strong economic outcome. To conclude, this essay argued why to increase the prices for the people who is travelling from abroad to their interesting tourist destination is justified a detriment to the host country somewhat. In my opinion, in the tourist spots there should be equality for the all so that no one could feel inferior.
It is undeniable that tourism has become a booming industry these days.
However
,
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some
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people
contend that foreign
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tourists
should
be charged
more
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
compared to the
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people
of a host
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country
during their visit to the
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worthseeing
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places
of the
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country
. This essay will argue why charging high
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prices
for the
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people
of
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other
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countries
is a
slightly
preposterous despite
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some
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other
potential reasons.

To
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begin
with,
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many
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people
tend to choose abroad
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countries
for travelling and the
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idea
to pay higher amount of
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money
than
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other
visitors is an unacceptable to
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some
extent. The reason why
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prices
should be same for all is that if the host
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country
will
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get
more
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money
from foreigners, then there will be a drastic decrease in the number of visitors
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because
no one will consider this
positively
and feel themselves
being robbed
by the
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people
of that particular area.
Indeed
, there have been
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some
recorded instances of
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people
who travel
frequently
to
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other
destinations of their interest always feel connected with that particular
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place
when they
are treated
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
equally and
they
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keep
the desire to travel to that
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place
more than once. These few instances
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make
it
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clear
why native nation should be respectful towards the residents of the
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other
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place
in terms of the chargeable cost of hotels, restaurants and
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other
activities of their interest.

Despite this,
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some
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tourist
excursions are available
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only
in a limited time of the year and for the dwellers of that particular
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place
, tourism might be a seasonal occupation and in order to boost their economy in a restricted time period it is a quite reasonable to
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get
lucrative from the foreigners.
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Because
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people
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have to
rely on their seasonal income for the rest of the year
that is
why it is
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insisted to charge
a
Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".
little bit
more from the cross
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country
nations.
Moreover
,
certainly
for the infrastructure of the renowned visiting
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places
large sum of
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money
is required
and
eventually
it would be
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only
possible if the
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prices
of the activities are higher.
For example
,
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Manali
is a popular hill station of India where one could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
immense visitors
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only
in summer season and the
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people
of that
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place
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
massive avail from the visiting folks.
Overall
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to
be paid
more
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money
by another nationality dwellers could
potentially
lead towards the strong economic outcome.

To conclude
, this essay argued why to increase the
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prices
for the
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people
who
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is
travelling from abroad to their interesting
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tourist
destination
is justified
a detriment to the host
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country
somewhat. In my opinion, in the
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tourist
spots there should be equality for the all
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so
that no one could feel inferior.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
445 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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