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For sucess in school and work, the ability to adapt or adjust to a changing condition or circumstance is more important than have in excellent knowledge of a job or a field of study. Do you agree or disageee. v.1

For sucess in school and work, the ability to adapt or adjust to a changing condition or circumstance is more important than have in excellent knowledge of a job or a field of study. Do you agree or disageee. v. 1
We are running out of fuel owing to its increased consumption, according to some people one solution may be to raise the prices of petrol. I disagree to this pinion as it may affect people from low socioeconomic group. The escalation in the price of gasoline in order to reduce its consumption is not a good notion as it will primarily influence people with low income. As the price hike will be same for rich and poor, it will have a detrimental effect on the budget of low socioeconomic group. They may have to reduce the expenses on more important expenditures like education and health of children. As the prices of petrol is closely linked to other domestic consumer items like edible oils and food items, eventually it will result in a generalized price hike which is not feasible. Therefore, saving for petrol at the cost of health and education is not a useful bargain. The increased rates of fuel cannot be considered an isolated rise. This fuel is used in factories and industries for the production of garments, sugar, salt and other basic amenities of life so their prices will also rise. This may result in generalized inflation and then government has to pay subsidization for the general public. For example, in the Iraq war, destruction of petrol reservoirs resulted in a sudden hike in price for petrol per barrel which almost affected the global economy. Hence, the increase in the value of petrol will practically make everything expensive. In conclusion, the increase in petrol price to reduce its consumption is not a good option, governments should rather lay stress on the use of hybrid and other fuel efficient cars in order to conserve what we already have.
We are running out of
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fuel
owing to its increased consumption, according to
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some
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people
one solution may be to raise the
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prices
of
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petrol
. I disagree to this pinion as it may affect
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people
from low socioeconomic group.

The escalation in the
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price
of gasoline in order to
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reduce
its consumption is not a
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good
notion as it will
primarily
influence
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people
with low income. As the
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price
hike will be same for rich and poor, it will have a detrimental effect on the budget of low socioeconomic group. They may
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have to
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reduce
the expenses on more
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important
expenditures like education and health of children. As the
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prices
of
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petrol
is
closely
linked to other domestic consumer items like edible oils and food items,
eventually
it will result in a generalized
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price
hike which is not feasible.
Therefore
, saving for
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petrol
at the cost of health and education is not a useful bargain.

The increased rates of
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fuel
cannot
be considered
an isolated rise. This
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fuel
is
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used
in factories and industries for the production of garments, sugar, salt and other basic amenities of life
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so
their
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prices
will
also
rise. This may result in generalized inflation and then
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government
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has to
pay subsidization for the
Consider using "public".
general public
.
For example
, in the Iraq war, destruction of
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petrol
reservoirs resulted in a sudden hike in
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price
for
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petrol
per barrel which almost
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affected
the global economy.
Hence
, the increase in the value of
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petrol
will
practically
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make
everything expensive.

In conclusion
, the increase in
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petrol
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price
to
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reduce
its consumption is not a
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good
option,
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governments
should
rather
lay
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stress
on the
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use
of hybrid and other
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fuel
efficient cars in order to conserve what we already have.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay For sucess in school and work, the ability to adapt or adjust to a changing condition or circumstance is more important than have in excellent knowledge of a job or a field of study. Do you agree or disageee. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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