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For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. v.1

For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. v. 1
Cycling has always been an important mode of conveyance. There are some individuals who believe that cycles are even now the perfect mode of getting around to various places. In this essay, I will discuss the merits and de-merits of cycling to different locations and explain why it can be beneficial. In fact, there are a few disadvantages of pedaling. Firstly, it takes more time to convey from different points in the city. For example, it is widely known that the speed of the cycles cannot be matched with that of motor vehicles. Secondly, the passenger would need to labour hard for conveyance. Finally, cycling can be done for shorter distance, especially in the city centre. To exemplify, it is an accepted fact that a regular cyclist cannot pedal for longer distance and especially through rough terrain. On the other hand, there are a lot more advantages of cycling to work. Not only is the mode eco-friendly, but also is cheaper. For instance, many people in the lower income strata prefer to cycle to work rather than relying on other vehicles with engines, which can help bring down their cost. Additionally, cycling can help create a society of healthy people with active lifestyles. Moreover, cycling demands lesser space compared to other modes, which requires huge infrastructure with billions of investment. One clear example is the study in Denmark, which shows that the infrastructure spending for cycle track is much lesser than rapid rail lines and which is further capable of carrying number of people than by rapid lines in a unit area. To conclude, there are a lot of merits for cycling, which outweighs its demerits easily. Hence, many people believe that it is one of the leading modes of transportation. Clearly, cycling is increasingly garnering a lot of publicity and attention recently, which can result in a less polluted society with healthier people.
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Cycling
has always been an
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important
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mode
of conveyance. There are
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some
individuals who believe that
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cycles
are even
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now
the perfect
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mode
of getting around to various places. In this essay, I will discuss the merits and
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de-merits
of
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cycling
to
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different
locations and
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explain
why it can be beneficial.

In fact, there are a few disadvantages of pedaling.
Firstly
, it takes more time to convey from
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different
points in the city.
For example
, it is
widely
known that the speed of the
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cycles
cannot
be matched
with that of motor vehicles.
Secondly
, the passenger would need to
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labour
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hard
for conveyance.
Finally
,
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cycling
can
be done
for shorter distance,
especially
in the city
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centre
. To exemplify, it is an
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accepted
fact that a regular cyclist cannot pedal for longer distance and
especially
through rough terrain.

On the other hand
, there are a lot more advantages of
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cycling
to work. Not
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only
is the
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mode
eco-friendly,
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but
also
is cheaper.
For instance
,
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many
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people
in the lower income strata prefer to
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cycle
to work
rather
than relying on other vehicles with engines, which can
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help
bring down their cost.
Additionally
,
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cycling
can
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help
create a society of healthy
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people
with active lifestyles.
Moreover
,
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cycling
demands lesser space compared to other
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modes
, which requires huge infrastructure with billions of investment. One
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clear
example is the study in Denmark, which
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shows
that the infrastructure spending for
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cycle
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track
is much lesser than rapid rail lines and which is
further
capable of carrying number of
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people
than by rapid lines in a unit area.

To conclude
, there are
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a lot of
merits for
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cycling
, which outweighs its demerits
easily
.
Hence
,
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many
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people
believe that it is one of the leading
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modes
of transportation.
Clearly
,
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cycling
is
increasingly
garnering
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a lot of
publicity and attention recently, which can result in a less polluted society with healthier
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people
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay For success in a future job the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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