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For centuries mportant part of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths with the advent of computers. some people think that computer skill be made as four skills to be added to the list In what extent do you agree or dissagree v.2

For centuries mportant part of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths with the advent of computers. some people think that computer skill be made as four skills to be added to the list In what extent do you agree or dissagree v. 2
In the modernisation era, education is become the dire need of the people not only for individual growth but for country growth also. From many decades, three skills are essential part of the education such as reading, penning and math but with the arrival of computer some people assert that it should added in the education system as a fourth skill while others condemn about this statement. I agree with the former statement which I will portray in the following subsequent segment. There are multifarious reasons which can propitious to my view point. The predominate reason is that to survive in the modern word it is mandatory to have knowledge about the computer because in the word in which people are living doing all their work with the help of computer whether they are businessmen, Banker, lawyer etcetera. Nowadays everything is going to computerise and people prefer to work on computers rather than manually. Because of these reasons, it is vital to giving them knowledge about computer in their infancy age. For instance, the President of India has announced that he will make the Digital India that everything will be computerised in the future so to get job in the future it is essential to have knowledge about computer. Leaping further, if people have no knowledge about computer then they would become lacked as compare to their peers and will not able to get lucrative jobs in the future due to this, government ought to be made computer as a fourth skill in the education system to get the immense benefits and for thrive the career of the learners. In this way, the level of country economy will also tanscent. To recapitulate, everyone has their own views, I do not deny any of them but I cogitate that computer ought to be the forth skill so that all children get the knowledge about it and ward off themselves from detrimental effects and show their superiority in all over the world otherwise it will ruin the future of the people and shook the whole country progress and becomes the havoc for the particular nation.
In the
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modernisation
era,
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education
is become
the dire need of the
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people
not
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only
for individual growth
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but
for country growth
also
. From
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many
decades, three
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skills
are essential part of the
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education
such as reading, penning and math
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but
with the arrival of computer
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some
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people
assert that it should
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added
in the
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education
system as a fourth
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skill
while others condemn about this statement. I
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agree
with the former statement which I will portray in the following subsequent segment.

There are multifarious reasons which can propitious to my view point. The predominate reason is that to survive in the modern word it is mandatory to have
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knowledge
about the computer
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because
in the word in which
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people
are living doing all their work with the
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help
of computer whether they are businessmen, Banker, lawyer etcetera. Nowadays everything is going to
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computerise
and
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people
prefer to work on computers
rather
than
manually
.
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Because
of these reasons, it is vital to
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giving
them
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knowledge
about computer in their infancy age.
For instance
, the President of India has announced that he will
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make
the Digital India that everything will be
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computerised
in the
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future
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so
to
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get
job in the
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future
it is essential to have
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knowledge
about computer.

Leaping
further
, if
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people
have no
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knowledge
about computer then they would become lacked as compare to their peers and will not able to
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get
lucrative jobs in the
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future
due to this,
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government
ought to
be made
computer as a fourth
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skill
in the
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education
system to
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get
the immense benefits and for thrive the career of the learners. In this way, the level of country economy will
also
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tanscent
.

To recapitulate, everyone has their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
views, I do not deny any of them
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but
I cogitate that computer ought to be the forth
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skill
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so
that all children
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get
the
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knowledge
about it and ward off themselves from detrimental effects and
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show
their superiority in all over the world
otherwise
it will ruin the
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future
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and shook the whole country progress and becomes the havoc for the particular nation.
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IELTS essay For centuries mportant part of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths with the advent of computers. some people think that computer skill be made as four skills to be added to the list In what extent do you agree or dissagree v. 2

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