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For centuries, importan parts of education have remained such reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to added to the list. to what extent do you agree? v.1

For centuries, importan parts of education have remained such reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to added to the list. v. 1
Now a days Tourism becomes a cash cow to generate money and most of the countries depend on it. On the other hand, it is also a source of headache if not regulated in a correct way. In my opinion, I think that the benefits are more and it outweighs the drawbacks. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument by explaining advantages and disadvantages with relevant examples. Firstly, Tourism helps people across the globe to explore any part of the world. Students from different educational background might experience the reality for instance, a student pursuing history, honours can explore a historical place practically. Furthermore, it's also providing a huge job opportunity in tour and travel industry. I believe, in our hectic life schedule, it's important to explore different countries breathtaking views which gives us amusement and relief from our daily stress. Countries like Dubai, Singapore their economy based on tourism. Their hospitality towards tourist are also impressive. Nevertheless, if we see another side of the coin than its really a pain in our neck. Due to quarantine negligence at airports, a new disease might enter in any country. It can also lead to cyber crime and as its already been abandoned by law taking pictures of some of our cultural heritage, buildings, monuments, etc. Last but not the least, people unwillingly damaging country's beauty by spitting or throwing packets anywhere which is much food for thought. To sum up, tourism is much necessary to any country to promote its cultural heritage and diversity. simultaneously, a strict action is needed by law to eradicate the drawbacks. It's more indispensable to change our mindset and to keep clean our country.
Now a days
Tourism
becomes a cash cow to generate money and most of the
countries
depend on it.
On the other hand
, it is
also
a source of headache if not regulated
in a correct way
. In my opinion, I
think
that the benefits are more and it outweighs the drawbacks. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument by explaining advantages and disadvantages with relevant examples.

Firstly
,
Tourism
helps
people
across the globe to explore any part of the world. Students from
different
educational background might experience the reality
for instance
, a student pursuing history,
honours
can explore a historical place
practically
.
Furthermore
, it's
also
providing a huge job opportunity in tour and travel industry. I believe, in our hectic life schedule, it's
important
to explore
different
countries
breathtaking views which gives us amusement and relief from our daily
stress
.
Countries
like Dubai, Singapore their economy based on
tourism
. Their hospitality towards tourist are
also
impressive.

Nevertheless
, if we
see
another side of the coin than its
really
a pain in our neck. Due to quarantine negligence at airports, a new disease might enter in any
country
. It can
also
lead to cyber crime and as its already
been abandoned
by law taking pictures of
some
of our cultural heritage, buildings, monuments, etc. Last
but
not the least,
people
unwillingly
damaging country's beauty by spitting or throwing packets anywhere which is much food for
thought
.

To sum up,
tourism
is much necessary to any
country
to promote its cultural heritage and diversity.
simultaneously
, a strict action
is needed
by law to eradicate the drawbacks.

It's more indispensable to
change
our mindset and to
keep
clean our
country
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay For centuries, importan parts of education have remained such reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to added to the list. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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