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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree? v.6

For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. v. 6
Nowadays, with the advancements in the computer field, It is believed by many that computer skill is now the fourth skill after reading, writing, and mathematics. However, some people do not agree with this thought. I believe, it is a very good decision and it will add a lot of importance to any student profile. Certainly, computer knowledge is going to be the boon to the student studies. Firstly, computer skill will help students to use the internet so that they can reach to the world and vast information era with ease. Secondly, they can study the first three major skills from computers using the internet and connect to different domain experts in these fields across the globe. Finally, using computers, the student can save precious time of them by studying remotely from any place without a hassle of different problems like traffic. In addition to the above, computer knowledge is an important aspect of today's job world needs. If you have computer skills, then you will be eligible for a vast number of jobs. For instance, Information Technology, Health, Automobile, Government sector, and others, all of them have a wide number of job openings for individuals with computer skills. Furthermore, our education system should have been updated with time, as we cannot rely only on the old methods of education. Although old subjects like reading, writing, and mathematics have importance, we cannot deny the pivotal role of computer skills. In conclusion, the future of the world depends on computers and it would be a wise decision to have computer skill as a fourth skill.
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is believed
by
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many
that computer
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skill
is
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now
the fourth
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skill
after reading, writing, and mathematics.
However
,
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some
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people
do not
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agree
with this
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thought
. I believe, it is a
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very
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good
decision and it will
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add
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a lot of
importance to any
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student
profile.

Certainly
, computer knowledge is going to be the boon to the
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student
studies.
Firstly
, computer
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skill
will
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help
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students
to
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use
the internet
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so
that they can reach to the world and vast information era with
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ease
.
Secondly
, they can study the
first
three major
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skills
from computers using the internet and connect to
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different
domain experts in these fields across the globe.
Finally
, using computers, the
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student
can save precious time of them by studying
remotely
from any place without a hassle of
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different
problems like traffic.

In addition
to the above, computer knowledge is an
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important
aspect of
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today
's job world needs. If you have computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
, then you will be eligible for a vast number of jobs.
For instance
, Information Technology, Health, Automobile,
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Government
sector,
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and others
, all of them have a wide number of job openings for individuals with computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
.
Furthermore
, our education system should have
been updated
with time, as we cannot rely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
methods of education.

Although
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old
subjects like reading, writing, and mathematics have importance, we cannot deny the pivotal role of computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
.
In conclusion
, the future of the world depends on computers and it would be a wise decision to have computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
as a fourth
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skill
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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