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Some people believe that it is better to share as much as information in scientific research, business and academic worlds but others think that some information are too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that it is better to share as much as information in scientific research, business and academic worlds but others think that some information are too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 1
According to many, it is better to share data in academia, research and business fields in maximum abundance whilst other school of thought persist which suggests not to share valuable information at free of cost. This essay will shed light on both views and justify its position towards the free circulation of data in scientific research, business and academia for the sake of innovation and world’s economic growth. One school of thought supports the free dissemination of data in the worlds of scientific research, academia and trade. This is because sharing data at free of cost ensures the maximum access to its users. Ensuring highest accessibility to the desired information allows researchers, scientist and business analyst to practice innovation in their fields which eventually may lead to groundbreaking discoveries. Such innovation may not only ease the problems of mankind, but also accelerates the wheels of the economy. Therefore, it is urgent to make all sorts of data freely accessible to its users and not being able to do so may disrupt the process of innovation as well as the economic growth. For example, researchers willing to conduct research on the climate change may find it difficult to collect data on the global scale as many countries keep their record private which may consequently lead to the poorer result of the research. Other thinkers believe that it is better to keep some record private as they are highly valuable. This idea is understandable as un trusted user may use the data in a destructive way which may cause severe harm to the individuals. For example, nuclear research is a sensitive area to be dealt with and many information is kept to the highest level of secrecy as one can easily misuse the data and cause harm to the global. However, this problem can be solved by using artificial intelligence and smart technologies which will check the intention of the user before handing over the data at free of cost. Data must be set free to its user to promote innovation, excellence and world’s future growth. One part of the world votes for the free availability of information on research, trade and academic world, whereas another part says that few records are too important to be shared at free of cost. In my opinion data should be made available to its users in the fields of research, academia and business for the sake of innovation and future economic growth of the world.
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in academia,
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and
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business
fields in maximum abundance whilst other school of
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thought
persist which suggests not to share valuable
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information
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free
of
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. This essay will shed light on both views and justify its position towards the
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free
circulation of
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data
in scientific
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research
,
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business
and academia for the sake of
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innovation
and
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world’s
economic growth.

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thought
supports the
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dissemination of
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data
in the
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worlds
of scientific
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research
, academia and trade. This is
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sharing
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data
at
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of
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ensures the maximum access to its
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users
. Ensuring
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highest
accessibility to the desired
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information
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allows
researchers, scientist and
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analyst to practice
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innovation
in their fields which
eventually
may lead to groundbreaking discoveries. Such
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innovation
may not
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only
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ease
the problems of mankind,
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but
also
accelerates the wheels of the economy.
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, it is urgent to
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make
all sorts of
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data
freely
accessible to its
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users
and not being able to do
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so
may disrupt the process of
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innovation
as well
as the economic growth.
For example
, researchers willing to conduct
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research
on the climate
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change
may find it difficult to collect
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data
on the global scale as
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many
countries
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keep
their record private which may
consequently
lead to the poorer result of the research.

Other thinkers believe that it is better to
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keep
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some
record private as they are
highly
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idea
is understandable as
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un
trusted
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user
may
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use
the
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data
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in a destructive way
which may cause severe harm to the individuals.
For example
, nuclear
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research
is a sensitive area to
be dealt
with and
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many
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information
is
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kept
to the highest level of secrecy as one can
easily
misuse the
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data
and cause harm to the global.
However
, this problem can
be solved
by using artificial intelligence and smart technologies which will
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check
the intention of the
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user
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before
handing over the
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data
at
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of
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.
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must
be set
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free
to its
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user
to promote
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innovation
, excellence and
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world’s
future growth.

One part of the
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world
votes for the
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free
availability of
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information
on
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research
, trade and academic
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world
, whereas another part says that few records are too
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important
to
be shared
at
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free
of
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cost
. In my opinion
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data
should
be made
available to its
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users
in the fields of
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research
, academia and
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business
for the sake of
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innovation
and future economic growth of the
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world
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better to share as much as information in scientific research, business and academic worlds but others think that some information are too important or too valuable to be shared freely. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
410 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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