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Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. Some people believe we should buy food from the local farmers to protect environment and support local businesses. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. Some people believe we should buy food from the local farmers to protect environment and support local businesses. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
With the advent of technology, it has been recorded that, basic needs like foods and clothes are transported from one part of the world to the other. Some scholars hold the belief that instead of this long route transportation it is better to buy food products from local farmers as it assists in protecting the environment and helps to flourish to local business, while other groups beg to differ. In my opinion, disadvantages of transportation of food, instead of buying from local markets, easily outweighs the advantages. Different parts of the world are uniquely blessed in terms of geography. Thus, food that grows in Australia might not be available in Canada. When the option of transportation of food is available, people from any nook of the globe can enjoy the delicacies of other cronies. Furthermore, kids will also have idea about all kinds of food available in the world, thus, their knowledge will not only be limited in the book’s pictures. Nonetheless, long route transport of food requires extra logistic cost, which eventually adds up to the unit price of food. In addition, when foods are bought from local market transportation of the same does not come into picture which not only save transportation or breakage cost, but also eventually protect the environment, as fumes from vehicles is not emitted. Furthermore, when these items are bought from local shops, it increases the economy of that particular region. The rate of increase in employment also comes into play as local business of food supply needs manpower to grow, maintain and sell food to consumers. All in all, the disadvantages when food, travel miles to reach end consumers completely outweighs the advantages as buying food from locally available sources will enhance the sustainability of the environment and boost the regional economy by providing employment opportunities to locals and the exchange of money within the region.
With the advent of technology, it has
been recorded
that, basic needs like
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foods
and clothes
are transported
from one part of the world to the other.
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Some
scholars hold the belief that
instead
of this long route
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transportation
it is better to
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buy
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food
products from
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local
farmers as it assists in protecting the environment and
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helps
to flourish to
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local
business, while other groups beg to differ. In my opinion, disadvantages of
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transportation
of
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food
,
instead
of buying from
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local
markets,
easily
outweighs the advantages.

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Different
parts of the world are
uniquely
blessed in terms of geography.
Thus
,
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food
that grows in Australia might not be
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available
in Canada. When the option of
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transportation
of
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food
is
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available
,
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people
from any nook of the globe can enjoy the delicacies of other cronies.
Furthermore
, kids will
also
have
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idea
about all kinds of
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food
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available
in the world,
thus
, their knowledge will not
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only
be limited
in the book’s pictures.

Nonetheless, long route transport of
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food
requires extra logistic cost, which
eventually
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adds
up to the unit price of
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food
.
In addition
, when
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foods
are
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bought
from
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local
market
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transportation
of the same does not
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come
into picture which not
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only
save
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transportation
or breakage cost,
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but
also
eventually
protect the environment, as fumes from vehicles is not emitted.
Furthermore
, when these items are
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bought
from
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local
shops, it increases the economy of that particular region. The rate of increase in employment
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
into play as
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local
business of
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food
supply needs manpower to grow, maintain and sell
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food
to consumers.

All in all, the disadvantages when
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food
, travel miles to reach
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end
consumers completely outweighs the advantages as buying
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food
from
locally
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available
sources will enhance the sustainability of the environment and boost the regional economy by providing employment opportunities to
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locals
and the exchange of money within the region.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. Some people believe we should buy food from the local farmers to protect environment and support local businesses. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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